I can't Let It Happen!

This is about how I've talked to one guy and fallen for him, but then I have another guy that I also love as well.

I know I shouldn’t fall in love with you.

But it’s all happening.

The  feelings.

The sparks.

I hate it.

I do, but I don’t want it to go away.

The conversations we have, I cherish.

You’re the one thing that I think about.

There’s only one problem.

There’s another guy in picture as well.

Reviews

[Closing Thoughts]

This is a really short and simple piece, but the idea of it is very relatable to many people. The flow is well done- short of choppy and rushed, as if the narrator is suffering an internal struggle and the readers get to witness that. I think that this little poem could definitely be fleshed out. Use your intense struggle and emotion to expand this. Delve into your deeper feelings; what does this guy have that the former lacks? Compare, contrast, elaborate on your emotions and describe encounters. Explain the conflict; the narrator 'hate' this, but why? Why can't she just leave her former relationship for this one?

There's definitely a lot of potential here. Thanks for sharing.

[Heartful5160]

I will definatly have to come back and look at this, because I'm not going to be able to remember it all, but thanks for the review. I will definatly go back to look at it of support.

[Clovis Kabongo]

This was a simple and to the point poem, although, simplicity often correlates with many lives as this poem has done. It was nice!

[Vincent Makhathini]

Haha I just love this piece and the way it ends just solidifies and concludes it well.

[Heartful5160]

Thank you very much. Thanks for reading it! I take your comment to heart!

[Blank_fortunes]

I like that it ended exactly where it did. But yeah Love is crazy anyway.

[Heartful5160]

To me love is crazy and it's like your favorite restaurant. Once, you're there, you don't want to leave it, because the food was so great. And if and when you do leave it, you wanna go back to it. You'll want to feel it again. Just saying, because I know. Experienced it! Thanks for the review!

[Valkyrie Warrior]

This is a brilliant piece!! You tell I good story in such few words!

[Heartful5160]

Thank you. I try to shorten my feelings, because if I didn't it would be too much to read.

[Valkyrie Warrior]

You are welcome! I understand that feeling.

[Heartful5160]

Shouldn't we all? LOL.

[Valkyrie Warrior]

I think we must.

[C. Lee Battaglia]

sad. :( I like it a lot! it's really cool! I think you have potential in your writing!
I can relate to this, I like it!
Keep it up!

C. Lee Battaglia

[C. Lee Battaglia]

You can reply back.

[Heartful5160]

Thanks for the comment. Yeah, sometimes I hate these moments in my life, but at the same time it gives me great material to work with.

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Your welcome!
I know how it feels... I'm sorry. :(
Can you look at my story The Blonde Girl? I think you would like it a lot!

[Heartful5160]

Sure I'll check it out.