Dark Loneliness

Tiny Poem about Dark Loneliness

The dark loneliness in my heart,

Hits me like a poisonous dart,

 

The fact that I feel this pain,

Shows I have more to gain

 

I want to find someone to love,

So I can feel like a majestic dove

 

If I can do that before I die,

I will be happy it’s not a lie

 

But this dark loneliness in my heart,

Hits me like a poisonous dart

Author's Note

Just need some tips for writing good stuff, constructive criticism appreciated. also i know the dove part is corny as hell, but i couldn't come up with anything else

Reviews

[joeysick]

Hello! I run an Instagram account that promotes the work of others, I am in love with this piece and was wondering if I’d be able to post it *you will be credited of course*

[Valentine]

Not silly. Not bad for a start. We learn as we write and read others work. Valentine

[Christopher Miller]

I haven't seen anything else of yours yet, but have you tried a freer verse rather than restricting yourself to rhyming? I have the sense of real emotion here, but also that you're limiting your expression trying to fit into a form.

[HeartInTheDark]

Thanks i appreciate the review, i didn't really think about a non rhyming poem. Also i am new on here but check out my content so far.