Within Beauty

Within beauty the meadowlark

    Laments to the field of blond, 

For past a singing of the sun

    Is serenity to the sets of beyond. 

In the meadow he cries

    Upon wings of rolling distance,

For the golden ground he dwells 

    Amid heaven’s incandescence.

Within beauty the meadowlark

    Upon rolling wings flies

To the singing sets through hills beyond

    In glorious, baying skies. 

Reviews

[Derek S.Keck]

This is interesting. You create a duality between this beautiful, almost angelic scene and then contrast it with the laments of a bird. I like the term laments too, it signifies, to me, that ultimate personal suffering. I took a whole semester last spring studying the bible from a literary standpoint, and I think...it was in Psalms(maybe?)… where you had the songs of lament. There was such desperation in the laments, like a call to the father was the last rational option they had, nothing earthly could save them from their personal struggle.

This poem took me to a moment when I was sitting here, on my computer, back when the violence first broke out in Lebanon. I was on CNN.com reading an article about the uprising and all of the civilian casualties, then all of a sudden my Pandora started playing a "wonderful world" and I just got the weirdest feeling. I appreciate your poetry; you have your own voice and your own poetic eyes. I’m going to let this piece simmer in my head a while. Cheers! Happy Turkey Day!

really beautiful I must admit... nice work yo. ^_^
I gotta say there are parts of the poem that are really well done. Overall, the descriptions and word choice is really where the poem shines, and to be packed into such a small free verse poem is really quite well done. If it's beauty you're attempting to portray as in according to the title, I must say, you've done just that and with such elegance. And, with a fair sense of rhythm/beat, another point yet worthy of appraise.
For much of this poems glory, I must add a bit of criticism though... there is a bit of small grammatical errors such as in line 3 where it seems to be missing the article "the" in front of the word "beyond" where it's actually kinda needed otherwise it describes a different kind of "beyond" you were going for which is the distance rather than the subject. There's really not much though else to point out, it's fairly good poetry.
Overall, because it's just that good, Imma gunna have to give this one a 98/100. I say great work and keep up the good job ^_^ expect to see more from ya

[Black Swan Poetry]

great flow and feeling this gives....

[Bare trees]

This is a really nice poem to read and the images jumped out at me the second time through. Great use of language too. I'm not sure what sets are? Well done.

[Lily Mae]

I love the fields of gold that you take my mind on in all your work.. You have a magic in the way you weave a poem...xx

[Kenneth The Poet]

Reminds me of a wheat field in summer. Thank for this.

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. Strong description make the scene of the poem come alive. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[AngMae]

Don't even know what to say except WOW! Don't really have anything to say haha sorry! Just wanted to let you know I thought this was amazing!

[Arthur Henn]

This plays out like a lyric of a beautiful song - Wonderful! Hayley

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh such a zen like quality to this piece... there is much beauty in freedom and seeing things through your own eyes rather than listening to the masses.