Nature's Eye

Summer sweet scent of nectar

With golden intoxication

And glistening pleasure,

Upon each petal shining dew

And a flowering kiss anew.

But lo! The sun of morn

Withers flaxen buds and leaves

To break free and land in streams reborn

Of tears from those beady eyes 

So all God’s creation will be baptized.

Through flowing arms of wispy veil,

The willow tree chants verse 

And shields its eyes behind the curtain assail,  

For the world his naked soul astounds 

Outside his reflection of crystal bounds.

In this sparkling stream I wish to fall, 

So sweet and pure a sound

As tender as lips can form sonorous drawl.

On mine plant mineral purity 

Until I’m lost in nature’s obscurity. 

Author's Note

About just thinking of a friend... and life...
Criticism, questions, comments appreciated.

Reviews

[Charlie]

I don't think I will ever quite get over the eloquence of your poetry.

So carefully stated, but not from reluctance so much as beauty.
The feeling of nature throughout the poem is clear, and powerful. Juxtaposing the beauty of spirit against the scenery adds validity and scope to this piece.

I'm having trouble believing your age, Hayley. =)

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is stunning work that warmed my heart and made me smile.
Just Lovely.

[Veronica Chandler]

Your poem is simply lovely; you captivated my attention in the beginning, "Summer sweet scent of nectar." I enjoyed the read emensely.

[Ruth]

You have such wisdom trailing through your words! That is why your writing works so well....there seems an empathic heart behind it all :) Brilliant piece xx

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I hate it when you write "beady eyes", it kinda ticks me off, i dont really know why, cuz its definitely not an attractive trait. I think i might know what this is about, and the stream mostly represents freedom. A stream flows in one steady direction, time, and time after freedom leads one to a lifetime.

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. I had to real a few times. A wise person can see the beauty in a day and in the splendor of nature. I like the kind and peaceful tone of this poem. Thank you for writing this amazing poem.
Coyote

[Lily Mae]

I think this is a wonderful write.. x

[Joel M Frye]

A beautiful poem, with a distinctive rhyme scheme...particularly like the half rhyme in the first cinquain. I'm not sure from whose "beady eyes" the tears fall in the second stanza; it's a disruption to me in an otherwise fine read. Well done.

[Robin]

Nature , elemental and pure , flow within that stream