Fruit of Temptation

Dedicated to my sister.

Why have the sweet bearings of thy voice

Ceased to allay the leaf of poisonous choice?

From thine own seed the sprout once grew

To each temptation fruit a slash anew. 

Woeful child who nightly dashes to escape

Satisfies gnawing hunger with not apple, but grape.

O ‘tis shriveled skins with a thin sheer veil

That grips the violet life of this girl so frail.

Her fingers water and flow to the succulent buds 

While her eyes sun and glow with tears of blood.

'Tis the rush of concord with the flowing of her wine

That moves this pen in the life that so resembles mine.

Reviews

[Derek S.Keck]

Just awesome! It seems people always have to work things out for themselves. In my experience, it’s the only way most people ever learn anything. I watched my brother take the road of excess and it almost destroyed him. All the wisdom in the world couldn't change his mind. Sometimes people just need to wake up to things themselves, unfortunately, most never see the character flaws that are destroying them. Like everything you write, this poem was beautiful.

[Tasha]

This was so beautiful and heartfelt Hayley, I know your sister loved it.

[Lily Mae]

"That grips the violet life of this girl so frail.
Her fingers water and flow to the succulent buds
While her eyes sun and glow with tears of blood",
This is pretty powerful work here.. I love it from beginning to end.. Perfect..xx

[Chris]

Wow. Amazing. What language and it all flows so beautifully. I think I can learn quite of few things from you.

[TJ]

amazing...

[Audrey Howitt]

Hayley, you are such a gifted writer! I am in awe of the emotion that you can pull out of a poem. Such truth in this one!

[Joel M Frye]

Yes...that's exactly how it feels to watch someone special destroying themselves.

[Liz]

Wow Hayley, i really like this. I could feel the emotions pouring through throughout the whole poem. It shows such deep concern and worry for your sister.
Favorite line;
"That moves this pen in the life that so resembles mine."
Really nice job.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Why have you chosen drink to bring you life............wonderfully penned Hayley, beyond wonderful

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Very old world, it puts me in mind of full emotional turmoil, well done, great read