Fruit of Temptation

Dedicated to my sister.

Why have the sweet bearings of thy voice

Ceased to allay the leaf of poisonous choice?

From thine own seed the sprout once grew

To each temptation fruit a slash anew. 

Woeful child who nightly dashes to escape

Satisfies gnawing hunger with not apple, but grape.

O ‘tis shriveled skins with a thin sheer veil

That grips the violet life of this girl so frail.

Her fingers water and flow to the succulent buds 

While her eyes sun and glow with tears of blood.

'Tis the rush of concord with the flowing of her wine

That moves this pen in the life that so resembles mine.

Reviews

[Derek S.Keck]

Just awesome! It seems people always have to work things out for themselves. In my experience, it’s the only way most people ever learn anything. I watched my brother take the road of excess and it almost destroyed him. All the wisdom in the world couldn't change his mind. Sometimes people just need to wake up to things themselves, unfortunately, most never see the character flaws that are destroying them. Like everything you write, this poem was beautiful.

[piggy]

this is really nice.

some great lines here, well done

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

I like the old poetic style to this.

[Jason Shadows]

Tempting Is N' It?
Very Poetic And Simply From The Heart.
Broken And Repaired Somehow From The Past.
But Its Love And Desire That Goes Beyond To Last.

I Like It.

[WynterPhoenix]

Wow. The wording of this is unbelievable. I'm sure your sister loves this. Great write.

[Shiningwolf]

Amazing, I have no words for this really. But I love the old style language you threw in there. It really put it all together.

[The old me]

simply amazing.

[Tate Morgan]

beautiful sound to it

[Ruth]

Beautifully used language love! Such frailty is so often helped with love and the right words :) xx

[Sourav]

Very well written. Use of old style of language makes it more interesting. The ending is fascinating!

[Meghan]

This was so great!! The language and flow of the words was so pretty! You really conveyed your feelings on watching someone you love self-destruct.