Grounded

Once again, someone who is no longer in my life. I think this does the whole idea better justice.

I hath wilted with the disdain nary of piety, 

For faith bade me good riddance four seasons ago;

My wounds lick the salt from thy notoriety, 

Parching the heart with the drought of woe. 

Perhaps I ought not to sit upon the spent;

Gossamer clouds dost seek vindication for none all too clear. 

I shall listen merely to my ground friend, the meadowlark’s lament 

To rid me of my musings austere.  

O the merry days held such wistful mind,

Pray thy rope of ash betwixt us fester and burn;

But no ocean can submerge the ties that bind,

Nor cease these flames that heighten churn.

Reviews

[EMF]

Yeah Gods. I make a point to click on one new person a day and am so glad I did. A fantastic read, vibrant and alive. Phrases that burn their way deep into the memory. So well written with such power. And such a clever usage of Olde Language. A terrific read both on paper and outloud

[Silvario]

wow, wasnt expecting this when i clicked on it. i am really very pleasantly surprised. beautiful diction here. your word choice and imagry is amazing. this was so pleasing to read and not at all difficult as some in this style can be.

you are clearly very talented. well done indeed :)

[Brandon]

"But no ocean can submerge the ties that bind,
Nor cease these flames that heighten churn."

Favorite line in this poem. It's pretty meaningful and the words you used were awesome.

[piggy]

happy sad

very sweet.
great use of words

[MAC]

incredible write! has that deadpoet feel to perfection. love the low-profile you put on passion in this piece!

[Omar Fendri]

wow the last stanza is utterly breathtaking.. O the merry days held such wistful mind,
Pray thy rope of ash betwixt us fester and burn... The vocabulary is powerful and hefty. The image is amazing, i read it twice to get the whole idea :) an amazing piece :) you've got a very unique talent :)

[Tim Lion]

Very old school. Feels sacred. Your images are wonderfully drawn, and, even with the hefty language, the emotions burn through your word. Skillfully done...and...I felt it.

Brava!

[Art Sun]

creatively written poem...

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[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Very good poem my friend, I like the word play.