Unbeautiful

Here in the sunshine
She wears the rays as a mask
And her playing eyes aren't honest, for once
Though she stares deep,
Willing they cover the rest of her yellowing body
Because today she can't afford a sundress-
But the sun in its integrity
Shines even still,
Lest she be unbeautiful.

Author's Note

Starting from scratch. Not completely happy with it.

Reviews

[Muse]

I think that often times that this is how "woman" feel in general. We hide our insecurites behind a broken smile. I could relate to this..on so many levels. And it is not scratch writing. This had class...elegance...and beauty. Your writing spoke to me deeply. High scores...

Muse

[kdanill]

So few words, so much meaning. Nice, keep it up. kdanill

[That1Nerd23]

This is lovely. Excellent piece.

[Pratik]

Contrary to the title, I think the poem is beautiful Hayley! This poem can be interpreted in so many ways... There are moments when we want to retreat into a shell.. in those reclusive moments we want to be left alone... and so we often put up a stance to allow ourselves that little bit of piece...and this is quite perfect i think.. i think the poem leaves many things unsaid which is the real beauty of this piece.... Good work!

[Coyote Poetry]

Real beauty must be found. People hide away from the sunshine. Afraid of disappointment. A interesting poem. Made my old mind work this early morning. A excellent poem.
Coyote

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This is very introspective, with a lot of emotions behind these words. Good job ,Hayley, and thank you for your read request. Keep up the great work.

-Cord

[Lily Mae]

As always your words intrigue me.. you speak the truth for so many.. I could relate to this heart and soul..xo

[Mr Dunne Poetry]

Very imaginative, I like this :)

[Jvl narasimharao]

simple but sweet and imaginative

[Poetic Beauty]

I like this poem. It make me think you are talking about the sun itself and as the days are getting shorter and the warmth of the sun not as intense as it is in the summer. I rather liked this piece.