Yesterday I Swallowed the Ocean Whole

Yesterday I swallowed the ocean whole,

As if I could claim it as my own,

And suffered quite a long night

With the salt echoing in my ears.

 

I may have gotten sea-sick,

But it didn’t matter

Because I was already sick

 

And had been standing open-mouthed on the shores for years

With the longing to drown.

Author's Note

I'm a little rusty...

Reviews

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Wow, both your imagery and metaphors are magnificent. I really like the analogy you make between the ocean and yourself, and I am pretty certain that the "rust" has washed away with the tides. Great job, Hayley, and thank you for your read request.

-Cord

[Hayley]

Thank you; I really appreciate it!

[Brandon S. Whitten]

This was quite brilliant. You're humble, always a good quality:)

[joshua deathdealer]

Wow. This is incredible. I like the blunt feel and harsh visuals.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Hayley, this piece runs very deep to me. I got in over my head, bit off more than I could chew, it doesn't matter because for years I have not cared about myself or wanted to continue existing anyway........Well done....you are not rusty at all.

[Stammers]

Stunning, as always.

[Audrey Howitt]

Beautiful write--doesn't feel rusty at all and such a pleasure to read your work again

[Dr. Wood ?]

I can relate to this..I live yards from the sea and it draws me....Wonderful title to what could be a wonderful song

[An owl on the moon]

Oh Hayley... you could never rust... you aren't merely a poet... you are poetry, dear friend! Here I sensed such an intimate vastness... swallowing the sea... taking its life and essence inside you... the overwhelming wonders... A depth of life and death and all in between... So good to have you back!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson..]

Love this poem great write Hayley well done

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I may have gotten sea-sick,
But it didn’t matter
Because I was already sick

that part reminds me of the saying if I am going to get into trouble for something I didn't do then I might as well do it.

Your poem may be short on words but long on mind simulating.

[Robin]

Good to read you again , a metaphorical evocative