Frosten Attraction

A brush with Death

Death came in eyes of diamonds 

Upon hills of rolling snow,

While the grass slumbered in frost

Amid the season’s stunt to grow.

He dripped in frozen flowers 

All breaking about his black dress,

The sweetness of passing about his hand;

Death and bloom motionless.

Let me to love the crystalline being

Who mourned the shattered petals so still,

That I may lie in biting beauty

In his winter garden of rolling hills.

Author's Note

Ah, symbolism. Gotta love it

Reviews

[Augustus]

I have a weakness when it comes to reviewing poetry. I am invariably attracted to works which exude elegance. And this verse is elegance personified. The lines are soaked in surreal euphemism. The photograph accompanying the poem could not have been more apt. I can't help but notice that you have mastered imagery at a very young age. The fact that you begin your poem with "Death came in eyes of diamonds" is proof enough.

"While the grass slumbered in frost
Amid the season’s stunt to grow"
These lines are enchanting in their solemn beauty.

"He dripped in frozen flowers" is nothing short of sublime. Winter, that angel of Death, is surrounded by his own handiwork. The "sweetness of passing" delicately portraying the flowers' imprint on this world.

"Death and bloom motionless" is epic in it's profundity.

While the second stanza is more descriptive, the third one is contemplative. The poet feels attracted to winter, because winter is not cruel. He "mourned the shattered petals so still". Winter has an enigmatic beauty, because the frozen petals indicate no malice on winter's part. The phrase "biting beauty" say it all, really. Indeed, if Death is to take all, may we all die this way, and the sweetness of our passing be remembered.

Masterfully done, yet again! You have my utmost respect, Hayley. Keep writing!

[R J Askew]

Like the 'eyes of diamonds' the 'black dress' and the 'biting beauty'. But what does it symbolise? that I can only guess at. Whisper it to me. I won't tell.

[MoriartyMesa]

What I enjoyed this was it was something that felt like it was written in another time. It made me think of a med-evil time, not so much knights and princess, but a noble time.

[writing mojo]

your depiction of death cold, and roaming is perfectly romantic, a dance perhaps like feathering dust in the wind, whirling to the confidence of being held by what has come then shed self in the ever after left..amazing stuff

[Tim Lion]

Well. I'm out of compliments.
This is good stuff.
Love the darkness, the flowers on his black garment.
All of it paints a haunting picture.
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[John Patrick Robbins AK..]

Yes indeed my friend you hold a power with words and this is a true gem of a write and thats nt just the booze talking cause i never bs about great work.
You flow this one fast and hit it straight outta the park really great read keep posting and stay crazy Gonzo

[Kenneth The Poet]

This rules. You should read this and play it against "Serenity" by Godsmack. Thank you for this.

[Pratik]

This poem has some stunning imagery to it... Death hasn't seemed never so beautiful.... very, very well done Hayley :)

[Muse]

The imagery reminds me of a young writer I used to read on WC named Kelsie Stark. She is only 16, but she could take verbs and make them tangible...nouns became a color, a movement. Your writing reminds me of this...and it's simply gorgeous.

[Moflo]

Your imagery is amazing once again! I can see many influences in your work from the romantics and yes, the symbolism is great. Good job!

[ChaoticSoul]

Beautiful symbolism and word choices. You did this wonderfully, from the poem, to its title, and the even the picture chosen. It all comes together in a perfect mesh to convey the depth within your words. Your imagery is vivid and precise. Really great writing!