Nature's Eye

Summer sweet scent of nectar

With golden intoxication

And glistening pleasure,

Upon each petal shining dew

And a flowering kiss anew.

But lo! The sun of morn

Withers flaxen buds and leaves

To break free and land in streams reborn

Of tears from those beady eyes 

So all God’s creation will be baptized.

Through flowing arms of wispy veil,

The willow tree chants verse 

And shields its eyes behind the curtain assail,  

For the world his naked soul astounds 

Outside his reflection of crystal bounds.

In this sparkling stream I wish to fall, 

So sweet and pure a sound

As tender as lips can form sonorous drawl.

On mine plant mineral purity 

Until I’m lost in nature’s obscurity. 

Author's Note

About just thinking of a friend... and life...
Criticism, questions, comments appreciated.

Reviews

[Charlie]

I don't think I will ever quite get over the eloquence of your poetry.

So carefully stated, but not from reluctance so much as beauty.
The feeling of nature throughout the poem is clear, and powerful. Juxtaposing the beauty of spirit against the scenery adds validity and scope to this piece.

I'm having trouble believing your age, Hayley. =)

[MoriartyMesa]

Love the mix of classic and something a bit deeper. Will need to read more.

[Allmax]

Talent, pure and simple Talent, cant be bought nor can it be taught. The flow of this poem was so smooth it felt like I was on Ice. This verse is so pure. "And shields its eyes behind the curtain assail,

For the world his naked soul astounds

Outside his reflection of crystal bounds."
Awesome... Thanks for sharing.

[Mark D]

Amazing piece. Notice you entered it to a competition. Sure it'll rank well! Thanks for sharing another beautiful bit of writing Hayley

[David Dodsworth]

a beautiful poem

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Friend.. Its Really lovely writing. Don't mind! But here your typing style make a reading difficulties. I like your whole wording. Keep it up!
Do you read mine to Anguish and She!

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

I admire your beautiful imagery of this piece. Absolutely stunning art.

[MAC]

what an amazing talent you have....breathtaking!

[joshua deathdealer]

Absolutely beautiful write...very touching. Nicely done.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

You make nature seem spiritual, beautiful and sexy at the same time. And it is all those things. Outstanding piece.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Piercing and bracing all at the same time, it invokes reason where chaos persists, well penned, great read.