Fruit of Temptation

Dedicated to my sister.

Why have the sweet bearings of thy voice

Ceased to allay the leaf of poisonous choice?

From thine own seed the sprout once grew

To each temptation fruit a slash anew. 

Woeful child who nightly dashes to escape

Satisfies gnawing hunger with not apple, but grape.

O ‘tis shriveled skins with a thin sheer veil

That grips the violet life of this girl so frail.

Her fingers water and flow to the succulent buds 

While her eyes sun and glow with tears of blood.

'Tis the rush of concord with the flowing of her wine

That moves this pen in the life that so resembles mine.

Reviews

[Derek S.Keck]

Just awesome! It seems people always have to work things out for themselves. In my experience, it’s the only way most people ever learn anything. I watched my brother take the road of excess and it almost destroyed him. All the wisdom in the world couldn't change his mind. Sometimes people just need to wake up to things themselves, unfortunately, most never see the character flaws that are destroying them. Like everything you write, this poem was beautiful.

[Inspiring Writer]

Tis the rush of concord with the flowing of her wine
That moves this pen in the life that so resembles mine.... Hahah :) these lines're awesome and well suited as a great ending. This write's not as usual, it's an unique one. I must say, you gotta write more on it. Your words're typically beautiful... and touched readers heart i believed.

Keep writing. You're doing and going very well. Soon, you'll be at top. Keep posting!

[Levi Levin]

Very nicely written indeed:)

[An owl on the moon]

Powerfully spoken... you spead out layer on layer of depth... the enchanted nature of temptations fruits... the magic and metaphors of life and love and longing... Rich and wondrous flow!

[screamin'ian]

Very potent.

[Crow]

A fantastic rennaissance image, portrayed by virtue in the flow of your word choices.

Refreshing!

[Revery]

This is of high standard and of the complexity of word and verse that I would aspire to produce. Perfect.

[The Analog Kid]

What a beautiful flow you have here. This is really top-notch.

[A.E. Surdam]

I have always loved the way you expression yourself through your words. This was a beautiful poem.

[Christian Adriaensen]

Great write Hayley,
I love every word of it!

[AndyJCash]

Ah, the work of a great poet. Absolutely amazing, such brilliant and creative choice of words and immense rhyming. Well done!