Haiku ~ Black eyed Susan

 

                                   night's veil caress them

                        onyx eyes watch unseeing

                          dewdrop tears trickle

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Danny Metcalfe]

Really beautiful piece. Says so much in so little words. Really great.

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

Thank you for your review, Danny.

[Sami Khalil]

"night's veil caress them
onyx eyes watch unseeing
dewdrop tears trickle"

[Sami Khalil]

Hi Sharon! Excellent form and content. You can be so descriptive and tell a story with much brevity. I hope they turn into tears of joy.

[Betty Hermelee]

Lovely words and images in the poem; I love the “ Onyx eyes watch” and I love Haiku too.
Best, Betty

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

Thank you for your kind review, Betty.
Sharon

[Sarah]

Such a dark poem composed in only a few lines, but it captures the essence you are trying to describe. I absolutely loved it!

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

Thank you for stopping by!

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Ahhh!!!! Enjoyed this one today..Thanks for the visit to my page..You have captured the 24 hour description of the Black-Eyed Susan(Rebeccia)..Sara

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

Thank you for your visit and review! Stop by All Aboard the Haiku Express if you have time!

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Thanks for the invitation..Sara

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing description of the flower. The gift of nature can be the Poet's muse. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry Sharon.
Coyote

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

Thank you, kind poet, for stopping by!

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.