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All these untitled poems are bothering me. Please give some suggestions. Thanks. :)

You ran away
With my heart.
Kicking it around a little,
Then tearing it apart.

You seemed to be
The girl of my dreams,
But you turned out so different
I just wanted to scream.

I was lucky
You confessed that you lied.
If it was any later,
I probably would have died.

I wouldn't have lived to see another day
To see your sweet face.
It was with my heart you liked to play,
But I still live for you,
Hoping your heart turns my way.

I hope you become his wife,
You'll be as happy as can be.
But in my life,
It'll be the greatest tragedy.

Your heart is his
In this lifetime.
But in the next,
I'll make sure it's mine.

I screwed up a portion of my life,
Just for you.
And you repaid me in the end by saying:
"I never loved you".

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[Kristina]

What about titling this one YOU?

[Kristina]

Your heart is his
In this lifetime.
But in the next,
I'll make sure it's mine.

I screwed up a portion of my life,
Just for you.
And you repaid me in the end by saying:
"I never loved you".
Son I felt those words stronger than the rest. I love the next life its mine thing. I feel you sweety.
do not feel ashamed of having this gift, most poeple would kill to be able to write. embrace this talent and keep going, don't let anyone take your spirit for it.
Keep in touch if you want. Great job!!!

Christina

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I can feel the emotion in your write, i love the rhyme scheme as well, this is very well written.

[Everchanging Disaster]

This really breaks my heart and I can identify with the situation.
Very well written,
love the rhyme scheme,
all in all a great read.

Thanks for sharing!