Heaven

a poem about living in present moment.

 

What do you think heaven is?

Do you know it's the ultimate bliss?

Do you think it's high in sky?

For if you think it's a big great lie.

It's here,now and now it's gone!

Open your senses and don't dare to yawn!

Cause you can lose in a second like this.

Look,look now,i know you missed.

Don't you say,you still didn't understand!

Heaven is in present moment my friend!

If you are too involved in your past.

you won't see heaven, it disappears fast!

Author's Note

i'd be glad to recieve reviews nd it will help me improve my work.

Reviews

[Confuser]

I thought it was great and believe you are so right. Great job. Keep writing! Very incitement message and great flow. Thank you.

[harshita]

thank you..... :)

[Confuser]

You are welcome.

[Wayne Rockmore]

A beautiful and simply rendered message, that in its apparent simplicity, holds great depths. This is a very good poem that offers more questions than answers, but that is a good thing. It forces the reader to consider how the values expressed in the work are applicable or not to their individual life. I think that's what great art should, and does do. Excellent work!

[harshita]

thank you sooo much... :)

[Moonie]

I have never really liked rhyming poems as much as I like free style ones, because rhymes seem forced in most of the poems(now, I don't have anything against them. One of my favorite poets is Shel Silverstein, and his poems always rhyme.....) However, that is not so in this one. It flows nicely, and the words seem to fit perfectly. Well done! :)

[harshita]

thank you so much... i'm glad you liked it :)

[jjwilbourne]

This was great. Very inspired.

[harshita]

thnks :) i'm glad it could inspire you :)

[Jimmy Yetts]

No dwelling on the past; no wondering about the future.
A difficult state of mind to attain--harder by far, to sustain.
Excellent poem, hashita!

[harshita]

thank you sooo much... :)