Lets call it bad luck

Demons find their home 

in my brain.

Confusing what is crazy,

and what is sane?

I cannot recite the definition,

 between love and hate.

Every feeling  that runs through me, 

seem all the same. 

Hard to finish anything. 

when you feel, 

you have no brain.

But I smiled through it all, 

even smiled after the hard falls.

I wanted my peace I was promised 

but promises I leaned, 

didn’t guarantee peace at all. 

I learned the hard way, fairy tales

 was never for me. 

Actually nothing is guaranteed.

              

                -Brianna Rodriguez 

Reviews

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Brianna,

I truly smiled as I read this piece of your heart set to pen of page, for it is sobering to meet another Human Being who has sucked it all up, dealt with life as it is dished out, and faced the reality that we are truly promised nothing, can expect nothing, and likely shall receive nothing but pain and tears in this life, and all else, every joyous moment, is simply coincidental and icing upon the cake of our individual lives ... A very enjoyable philosophical read, to say the least ...

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

[Harmony.Txx]

Marvin Thomas,
You have hit what I am expressing in my poem, right on the head. Not very many understand this view of life because not many have experienced it. Yes bad moments but not quite like you and I have. I want others to know, We are here...
Thank you for reading and your awesome review, you have made my day knowing my writing reached out to you.
-Brianna

[Jessey Valentine]

Loved this poem.
Best, J

[Harmony.Txx]

Jessey,
Thank you!! :)

[Chris Shaw]

Fairy tales rarely happen. They are for story books. Life is tough and the path we travel can be anything but smooth. I don't know why, but those demons, all the negative thoughts have got a habit of coming to the fore. Relentless at times, less so at others. Hang in there. If you can smile while dealing with the crap, that is a positive. You express your emotions well in this poem.

Chris

[Harmony.Txx]

Chris, Thank you so much for your review! It is always an honor to read them.
All of my poems are written from life experiences..I am here helping others, making someone feel not so alone..

[W. Barrett Munn]

First off, let me say I love what you are saying and admire your courage to tackle this obviously personal subject. I also want to point out I am no expert in prosody but I am willing to share what I have read and learned from authors like Mary Oliver and James Longenbach.

It looks to me as if you and I share a common flaw in our poetry in that we tend to tell too much, to be too literal. The message of great poetry is never direct. One or two ways to say the same thing is to start this poem with either 1) a question, Have demons found a home in my brain?, or 2) by using irony, i.e., I am certain of my sanity, for we all have demons in our brains.

Anyway, I don't mean to criticize but only offer helpful suggestions so take what you like and throw out the rest.

[Harmony.Txx]

Thank you very much for your review! I keep all feedback in mind and i love to learn from others... I really appreciate your feedback! Thank you again!

[W. Barrett Munn]

Hi, Harmony,

May I first ask what type of feedback you would like to receive?

[Harmony.Txx]

Any feed back I will take! I love to hear it all!

[Sami Khalil]

Thoughts can be a friend or an enemy within, influenced by this and that. It is harder to take a decision when blurring occurs like fog. Sometimes we need those foghorns to guide us. No guarantees they will be fulfilled but we must try. Throw those seeds in the ground. Some will take hold, others will be eaten by birds.
A marvelous poem and subject.

[Sami Khalil]

"But I smiled through it all,

even smiled after the hard falls.

I wanted my peace I was promised

but promises I leaned,

didn’t guarantee peace at all."

[Harmony.Txx]

Thank you very much! I see it as, it is all a part of life. I have been here unwillingly too many times..

[Sami Khalil]

WOW! YOU ARE WELCOME...

[Relic]

No, things never seem to work out the way we plan or anticipate. There are times I ignore the first thing that pops into my head when thinking upon a subject. Life is weird. Our brains are weird.

[Harmony.Txx]

I agree our brains are weird. Good thoughts or "bad thoughts" Mine, seems to be my enemy... Thank you for taking the time to read and comment!