Throwback

“Memories warm you up from the inside. But they also tear you apart.” -Haruki Murakami

I closed my eyes and the raindrops poured on my face, drop by drop and the wind blew my hair all over the face, and all I imagined was a vision of you, the first time we ever met.

19March, By a lucky stroke of fate,I met you. Who knew the most dreadful day in a students life would turn out to be so lucky for me! The result day,the day you feared the most. No seat, you had no choice but to sit with m. I wonder how destiny arranges the perfect meeting of two people. That day, that very day was the turning point in my life. 

The very first day of the next class, we were seat partners. It seemed all the forces in the universe conspired to unite two hearts. From that day onwards this unusual thing became a routine. Sitting together, talking about anything and everything. Just like rain in november, we became the best of friends. 

What more could have been, all you could see was me and all I could see was you. Yeah,one of the best feelings in the world! We had fallen in love. The way you kept your eyes on mine as if everything else had vanished from the sight. Lots and lots of memories! 

Our calls started right from the morning. The first call to wake you up and the last one before you slept. Not letting me hang up was the best part!

Talking to each other every second of the day. The world seemed to be lost when you intertwined your fingers with mine. My stomach twitched with butterflies as if they were flying as high as me. I almost died when you came close to my ear saying ''I love you'' in the most passionate way,your  warm breath touching my neck and how I knew you meant every word you said. Our fights, break ups and patch ups, silly arguments, lots of promises! Ah! You gave me so much to remember.

I couldn't imagine us not being together. But who can unravel the games of destiny. We didn't understand what destiny wanted except for us being apart. A day ago we were two people who didn't let a second pass without talking and here we are today, 2 years and not a single hello! How my eyes want just one more glance of you and how my heart screams to talk to you, to hear your voice, to hear those three magical words again. I keep figuring out the reasons all those promises broke. How I sleep wetting my pillow with teardrops that fall for you every night and wake up imagining everything to be all right again, imagining you beside me. My days pass listening to those songs time and again. I spend my days writing about you, about us, about the reminiscences hoping something will bring you back! Everyday I sleep with the same hope and wake up with the same ache! But you're gone and this time forever! 

What time does to people, and how we are meant to accept it no matter how much it hurts. But then what else is Life! Ill remember all of this and so much more not only today or tomorrow but forever! 

Author's Note

Yet to be continued!!
My first writing apart from the poems, its kinda prose...please be honest with the reviews ie why you liked it ?
Why you didnt like it?
Corrections? etc etc....

Reviews

[JayceeC]

Heartache is a great source of writing. you have some awkward sentence structures in a few places and some I'm not sure say completely what you meant to. On a whole this is a good start. Remember that most people do not continuously speak in exclamations! That would be very tiring for both the speaker and listener, so limit them when you write, or they loose impact. If you need more direction on the clean ups let me know through messaging. ~Jan

[Anahat]

Yea even I felt that exclamations were actually too much...I'll correct them and take care of them in future...and yeah surely tell me the sentences that were not well structured through messaging :)
Thanks a ton for reading...Really appreciate your review :)

[Nikolean]

Sad and sweet, but maybe use less exclamation marks?

[Anahat]

yeah, thanks :)

[Aehr]

I think this would be a lot better if the exclamation marks were toned down a little bit. Apart from that, for your first attempt I believe this is pretty good. The emotions are well portrayed, the pace is neither too fast, nor too slow. Good job, and keep writing. :)

Have a great day.

- Rhea Xx.

[Anahat]

I actually realize now that exclamation marks are actually too much🙈
Thanks for pointing that out...I dont know why I have this urge to put exclamations...I'll take care!
Thank you so much :)

[Briana O'Connor]

This is very heartfelt and touching. The way you bring out the smiling "awe" to the teary eyed "awe" is brilliant. There is definitely potential for a great emotional impact. There were some spelling errors and misused words throughout the piece, and some racing thoughts that seemed to jump back and forth. I would recommend adding more depth to the piece and giving more detail as to how the events occur. Thank you for sharing this piece. Enjoyed the read.

[Anahat]

Yup sure I'll take care...
Thank you so much ☺️

[Avinash]

Its beautiful and heartbreaking at the same time.

[Anahat]

Thank you :)

[Ajay]

I have read this and definitely have to say that it is nicely written.

[Anahat]

Thank you :)

[Jesse Booker]

That was heartbreaking! The emotions of this story were very well conveyed. Excellent work!

[Anahat]

Thank you Jess :)

[Frank]

In love one has to be bold, not undiscerning but to know who one wants is something important. American would say go for it, you have to be inventive in love as you are in war. To win you must risk all, clever girls win the prize but make a battle plan and stick to it.
You write well about a lovesick girl, infatuated with the idea of love, it is normal... it happens all the time. I remember all the girl who chased me and cried on their pillows, I was not worthy of them, I snore in bed and sometime fart... a terrible thing to do but there it is, life is sometimes less than pure.
I could be your friend, but it would be unnatural a young girl with such an old man, but I wish you well in your writing. Boys may come and go but your skill in writing may remain your friend for a lifetime or two if you believe in reincarnation.

[Anahat]

Thank you for a kind review Sir!
I guess nothing matters when you truly love someone!
And we can be friends on this site for sure..:)

[Frank]

Love changes as you grow older, when young love is quite selfish, demanding even though women I believe on the whole know how to give and dare I say suffer in relationships. A woman's love is fulfilled in babies, there is nothing like the power and strength of a mother's love for her child, in most cases.
That's not to say men cannot love as well, it's just we all despise a woamn that falls below that standard set in society, don't we. As we grow older love takes ona different hue, our bodies change, its demands can mellow, our minds can slow, we become elss judgemental more discerning, willing to accept more.
Love for the young is in haste, passion, longing to be satiated, carnal love. Later old poeople bond with the young in a closer mix, a similar situation. Especially young children and grandparents have much in common and bond very well, that sort of love never dies, the fire slow burning, never extinguishes... it burn steady it is strong.
The old learn to love froma distance, people die yet are loved still. Families move away, fail to keep in touch... the flame burns still. Small acts of rmemebrence, a card, flowers, tokens make such a difference. The longing is in an embrace, to feel the warmth of their body, to smeel that fmailiar scent peculair only to that loved one, to feel their heart thunder 'neath a jumper, to hear their lovely voice, to enjoy the touch of their smooth cool hand, to rest ones head in their lap. Such thing are so personal we often fail to speak of them, we are physical, love is satiated in the physical, it finds peace and is strengthened by loyalty, respect, humour, kindness and so on and so forth.

[Anahat]

Yeahh I guess..I agree with you Sir :) love is very powerful indeed!
It can do wonders and has completely different meaning for each one of us! Death conquers all whereas love can bind all! A very strong feeling which sometime can make a person weak!
But yeah ...everyone deals with it!
Infact all the problems and thats life! :)

[Ashwin Thakur]

Someway between it becomes exaggeration and it is way too straightforward creation of character was needed here very much if you would have explained anyone of the character it would have been more awesome
A romance should be like that of a swan still behaviour of a human
Still first story way more beautifully written from what i had written first

[Anahat]

Thank you so much for the suggestion Ashwin :)
I'll take care! Thanks for stopping by :)

[Miyank]

Awww! So sweet. It was small but it is your first so no complains. It was something like I without your permission was reading a page from your diary.

[Anahat]

Aww..thank you so much :)
And the complains are very welcome friend..that would help me improve my next!
Thanks for reading!

[NoelHC]

This story was over too soon, I wanted more of the time together, and some signs as to what went wrong. I agree with JayceeC about the exclamation marks, most of them could be eliminated and nothing would be lost.

[Anahat]

Yeahh I agree!
Thank you so much :)