Autumn Clarity

Clarity came in the fall.

Through autumn’s leaves came the clarity,

Every flake of gold rushing in the light sky,

While the squirrels came rushing by,

Reaching to the blue from their treetop abodes

 

Then As the heavens wrap its navy cloak around the earth,

The peace comes with a song of silence,

And nature's hush guides us through the night,

While soundless birds take flight

 

As morning greets us with sharpness,

The creatures crunch through the leaves,

Leaving insightful thoughts upon us,

Letting us know of tomorrow's coming

Author's Note

Written a while back, I need some sonstructive critisizm. sp?

Reviews

[Red_Queen]

ha yes "sp" indeed.

but anyways onto the poem it was quite good it painted a picture in my head better then that creepy guy from 70's tv who had a really soft voice.....you know who i'm talking about.

but yes good job.

[Steffi]

I love the imagery usage here. It painted such a beautiful image of Autumn.
"Then As the heavens wrap its navy cloak around the earth,
The peace comes with a song of silence,
And nature's hush guides us through the night,
While soundless birds take flight"

[Nessa]

This imagery is OUTSTANDING.
The only constructive critism I have is to maybe make it a few stanzas longer.
Like maybe describe the feelings you have during this.