The Uknown

Oh the love poems I waste my time writing haha.I was on one of my emotional splurges and poured everything out.

I told you I was afraid of the unknown
The unknown meaning me and you
Heartbreak me and you
          I mean me and him
I'm afraid that his name will spill out of my mouth
            Taint my lips,pollute your mind with my unspoken thoughts
                  I still love him  
                         Although he has denied me my strongest desire
I'm afraid of you leaving when you find out I'm not on the mend ,
            that I don't care,that my feelings are gone,
            that he's far from my mind (but that's pretend)
I want to say I love you
Not to keep you ,but to reassure you that he won't replace you nor erase you
                         So I Love You

Reviews

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"I told you I was afraid of the unknown
The unknown meaning me and you
Heartbreak me and you
I mean me and him"
~i love the mood of reassuring love in this - great write :)

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

I like the intricate interplay of sentence construct~ it adds to the tug and pull of the emotion vibrabtly portrayed~

[Audrie]

I think that this is a well written tragic love story. "taint my lips, pollute your mind with my unspoken thoughts- i still love him " I believe that it is human nature to have love for more than one. you describe it beautifully and truthfully

[chaotic katie]

love it fantastic job i enjoyed this peice

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on the rebound..haven't we all done that, not wanting to hurt the person your with but not fully over the ex....really expression write

[Johnny A. Rojas]

LOVE it ....is well expressed the feeling made me realize of how we all have done that.

[Cherrie Palmer]

fickle is the heart that can not let go. Great job your use of words was perfectly done.

[Tony]

This poet's mind must be a place of rhythm and intellect.
I like the way the jilted love often is wary of even voicing the name of the object, concerned that doing so might unleash supernatural consequences.
Which indeed, it might......
And which was given props here, in an unobtrusive fashion.
Nice.

[Tim]

Love this twist! Great job!

[Lilly]

Oh the twists and turns of love - how it can tie you up in a tangle of knots....
Very nice poem about the anxiety love can cause at times. Great work.