Still Perfect

 

She was beautiful typical nowhere in sight

No blonde, No blue, crooked no

Adolescence froze, black heads rose

Still perfect

A lisp so she couldn’t talk right

Pessimism? Non-believer

Beyond her time, satellite receiver

Still perfect

No lies in sight

Nothing for granted, life above all

She loved trial and error, many “run into the walls”

Still perfect

Influence, still no change in sight

Girls look, what’s wrong with her ,What did she do

Can’t be envy ,she says there’s nothing to pursue

Still perfect

It’s gets to her, no hope in sight

Cut the fabric, Miss the skin

Too much of a coward to try again

What happened to perfect

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[LittleMadGirl]

i neede to read it a couple times before I got the last part .. but it's actually really good!
Ther's a great rhythm and also a wonderful mix of words that don't fit on first sight =)

[Daydreamer54]

Cut the fabric, Miss the skin

Too much of a coward to try again
This part is catchy! :P Any, it's a nice write and I do agree that it is sad in a way.

[Rory CJ Frankson]

You hang some cool images together, some that shouldn't mix and you make them oddly work. It has a good beat to it, that made me go through it, then go back a cople times to make connections. Yep yep, made for a cool kinda read.
Beat Poet hey! Cool... keep it snappy. lol

[Sara Rose]

Sad and sweet. I like it a lot.

[deeps]

This is a very well written write, i like this.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a good write. I think it was interesting. I also think it could be a song. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Steve]

Was this meant to be a song..? Because it sure could be....very well done.

[sammyj]

very deep imagery

[Jane Doe]

beautiful i wuvvvvv it