Suicide

One second the world is so beautiful

One cut I don't wanna leave

I wanna live my life in all its beauty 

Live a life free from someone's false pity

And stand tall with my head held high.

Its funny how the fear of death just drives you over the edge

When you know you don't wanna live

But still afraid to breathe your last breath.

Its funny how when you know you are gonna die

And Death is knocking on your door

He's gonna take you to the sky

And then you suddenly wanna live

You learn your responsibilities, your dreams are now too vivid

You don't want your life to end

The importance of life, you slowly comprehend

As that minute's decision makes you feel like a criminal

Guilty for leaving your loved ones behind, so sad and lonely.

Its funny how the world seems so peaceful

And the darkness slowly disappear

When you have death breathing on your neck.

Author's Note

don't know if this is a poem, don't know why i wrote but i just did:).

Reviews

[Shubham's View]

A topic which needs much debate, my friend, when all hope is lost, we may yet have a tiny opening in a corner, but we're blinded with it all, to see it. it is matter to be debated in the parliament of your head, because when all seems haywire, there might yet be order among the chaos.

[Hidden Happiness]

That 's true..thanks for reviewing:-):-):-D.

[RachelReaper]

I loved loved loved the last line, "When you have Death breathing on your neck", it really gives a hugely vivid image of dying, even if that's not the way I picture it, it does leave a lasting impression.

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

Wow this is truley amazing! I love it and it speaks to me cause I have had this happen to me many times and It scares a person to think like this and to know this may be your last day on this earth and many people cant go thru with there plans or choices. it is sad for those who actually go thru with suicide. This is truley an amazing peice!!

[Hidden Happiness]

Oh thank you so much...it means a lot:-).

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

I think this is more of a soliloquy. I like the grouping of the lines. It has both symmetry and asymmetry. It's like walking past a room where the door is partially ajar and pausing, we hear someone talking to their knife or gun or other instrument of their deceasation plan. As gloom and despair goes, this is right up there with the best. Congratulations... on not following through?

[Hidden Happiness]

Thank you so much$:-).

[TC Dunn]

very beautiful. Love the imagery.

[Lina Grey]

Well geez, nothing like a near-death experience to give you a pep talk. "Are you feeling down? Try suicide! You'll wanna pop right back up again. Just hope you fail." "Sick of living? Try suicide! It's a new perspective. Just hope you fail."
Eh, sorry. I don't mean to offend anyone. I know how serious suicide is and the effects it can have on people and all that, believe me. Joking is the only way I can really deal with it without getting emotional.
People don't tend to realize that death is a permanent solution to temporary problems. By the time they figure that out, it tends to be too late. Your poem shows that perfectly. I love the last stanza; it's such a powerful ending. Thank you.

[Hidden Happiness]

Thank you so much:-).

[eglantine]

I see it as a poem, but would also make an interesting flash fiction, if you elaborated more on the situation: why is the speaker feeling this way? Triggers? THanks for sharing! :)

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Its funny how the fear of death just drives you over the edge
When you know you don't wanna live
But still afraid to breathe your last breath.
My favorite part! You've got talent and you're using it well! 100/100 =)

[Hidden Happiness]

Thank you so much:-).

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no problem =)

[Leslie Philibert]

A very dramatic poem that excellently looks at the contradictions in ending your own life. Most people thankfully understand that they can`t destroy their parents of friends that way. What you did very well is to talk about the last choice, where everything is reduced into a simple question. Life is complicated, but it is worth keeping up and running, hope can never be destroyed.

[Hidden Happiness]

That is very true....thank you so much:-).