I am sure that it is good. I want to call this poem, dynamic or even 'alive.' I took special note of the part where you cite, 'Another white dove.' All throughout but in particularly I see it at that line, that your poem in not linear, not predictable. I pleasantly did not yet know how it was you came to be a 'black bird' nor did I know if the other 'white dove' would become a black bird as well. Perhaps she did. This poem is filled with eloquently imparted emotion. To be frank, it tells an interesting story quite clearly, showing not telling, leaving the reader to wonder about things a reader ought to wonder about and knowing what we ought to know. This poem takes us on a sort of plummet through emotion heading not just toward disaster but through it and beyond. At the end we are shown that the plummet may end, that joy and happiness may again be achieved, but still remaining is the bittersweet price of hope, that the chance that all can be well again is always balanced by the chance that it may not. Your poem is rich and full, containing hope and despair, joy and sadness, and so much more. Yes, I am sure that this is indeed very good. Wonderful, wonderful poem. Thank you for sharing.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank YOU for the review! I honestly didn't think it was that great, but I'm still thankful for the.. read moreThank YOU for the review! I honestly didn't think it was that great, but I'm still thankful for the encouragement. :-)
It indeed is good. White wings staining black of blood is pathetic.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Really? I thought the staining of the wings was good symbolism for how he transformed after the pai.. read moreReally? I thought the staining of the wings was good symbolism for how he transformed after the pain of his loss... Nevertheless, I appreciate your review. :)
I'm a pretty mild-mannered guy who enjoys composing poetry, playing video games, and drawing portraits. I don't think my writing's that good, but some of the people I have had read tell me otherwise... more..