Chapter 2 Woah, what now?

Starshine and Firestripe are two of my many created characters i have made.

  " Hey how did you all get so tall? " I ask.

  " Iere not tall your small " says Ash " here," He takes out his cell phone and I hear a small  click and he turns around and shows me the screen

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

crap I turned into Starshine*. I think

  " Okay now say change back to turn back to your original self."The trainer says. I do as she says and change back

  "Okay, that is my new screen saver!" Says Ash, following up with a giggle.

  " Hey!" I say

  " Ash it is your turn to change, you do exactly as Hannah." Says the trainer. He does and I see him surrounded by a rainbow light. He glows and I suddenly see a small orange cat ( hmm looks a lot like my other character Firestripe*) standing where he once was.

" Am i cute? " he asks.

" Here," I say and take out my cell phone and take a picture of him.

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  "Hah! I do look cute! I look Adorable!" Says Ash he mummbles somthing and turns back.

  "Thats gonna be my new screen saver!" I say mimicing Ash.

  " Oh look at the time. Training over, see you tomorrow!" says our trainer. me and Ash's wing un furl and we jump into the air.

  " so, off to Cumberlin's?" I ask Ash

  " yup!" He says as we soar off into the bright blue sky.

Reviews

[guiltyascharged]

Again, you need a lot of work on your punctuation, capitalizing and spelling. You're doing a great job with writing and word choice, but the chaps need to be longer and you need to work on it all.