Run

You run relentlessly in my dark twisted maze,
and stumble  through the dark cruel branches in a dream like haze.

You notice the black night swallowing the stars in the sky,
and the eerie glow of the moon glaring at you like an eye.

Demons are concealed in the menacing shadows spraying poison like fire,
their evil inhuman behavior makes the situation dire.

The intimidating bushes threaten to consume you in  a deadly embrace,
but you continue to run bravely in this dangerous cruel race.

I realize now who are my real friends,
so now the story involving them ends.

No one is supporting me, but I knew you would.
So I will be as kind to you as anyone could.

The girl that messed with you wasn't me.
It was a psycho insane person who I try not to be.

I thank you for everything and with you I have fun,
so keep on sprinting through the maze . . continue to run.

Reviews

[Lilly Negoi]

bravo :). very nicely done and an excellent conclusion!

[Lindsey]

I rally like it a lot. it is intaresting and creative.

[iamkim]

wonderful! i always love how you write your poems. and your stories too :) keep it up Hanna! i love em all :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Why is it that some people just can't see that every time they put their hand in the basket the same snake bites them? They continue getting bit and never learn......quite an excellent piece you have penned here Hannah.

[Laranda]

creative hannah, great write:]

[akapr17other]

Eerie and creative-I like this.

[KAREN]

I think it's well written. I was in the maze running around as I read, one can picture that as they read! (I DID!)

[fernii]

I like it :) Great write :)

[Quinn Blackburn]

Well done! Great atmosphere and descriptors that support both the rhythm and topic well.

[Midnight_Mystery]

very nicely done ..great write! :)