Beautiful Nightmare

You perfect pleading eyes beg me please,
as your weak body crumbles to your knees.
You lay beneath my dark intimidating door,
dragging yourself feebly across the cold floor.
You desperately whisper you forgive everything that I said.
and you love me and without me you feel empty and dead.
You act like your dying and trying to escape death's embrace,
and as you edge closer you reach out to gently touch my face.
You hold me for support and cling to my hand,
and carefully pull me closer as you stand.
This has to be the reason I was born,
for you to fix my broken heart when it was torn.
Tears of complete joy blur my vision as I begin to cry.
I would feel I had fulfilled my life if I was now to die.
You love me and I love you,
so now the fairytale ending could now come true.
Suddenely your amazing face begins to fade,
as I realize you are simply a image my mind has made.
My room becomes a prison disturbed by a ear splitting scream,
as I am brutally awaken from my cruel dream.
My twisted, shaking body is curled up in my bed
as I now feel numb and cold as if I am dead.
Being without you for months feels like I'm slowly dying.
I shudder violently in the dark as I start my crying.
I have seen other boys to show I have tried,
but I crushed their hearts cheated, stolen and lied.
With these poor, foolish boys I shared a kiss,
but it is your soft lips that I will always miss.
My heart breaks when I notice boys that look like you,
I just close my eyes because I don't know what else to do.
You have a new girl I heard,
I was one of the first to get the word.
I'm like a persistent spirit haunting a abandoned house,
as insignificant as a small hidden mouse.
I'm the lost memory that's unheard and unseen,
just another forgotten, unwanted broken teen.

Reviews

[absolutefolie]

Great write, well done :)

[Coyote Poetry]

"With these poor, foolish boys I shared a kiss,
but it is your soft lips that I will always miss."
The complete poem was very good. I like the story and the emotion of the poem. You described with skill the feeling of missing someone and wanting to be able to return to something that can't be found again. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Miele1228]

Amazing poem. The imagery you used was amazing and I love that you started writing young I'm only 15 and have been writing for a few years but only started poetry a few weeks ago and this is honestly one of the best poems I've read and as for self confidence i went through the same thing and if you keep writing the way you do you will not have a problem with that because the comments you will continue to get will be so uplifting because your a great poet! Amazing poem and please keep writing(:

[Patches I'm not so new..]

I enjoyed this it is a wonderful story and nightmarish but good stories particularly "love" stories have an element of anguish in them. Sometimes thing turn out well sometimes not. You are just starting to "come of age" as they say it is time for suh feelings as you express here to flower Have fun learning the experence is exilerating!

[C.N.Moore]

First off - I wish when I was 14 I could write this fluidly .. this well .. you have a lot of growing to do as a writer but to already be so far and only 14.. WOW.. you've just made a huge fan. This is fantastic !!

Second - The imagery.. the portraits you paint - the emotion you pull.. very nicely done. I am a big fan of painting picture by word and you do it so well. I look forward to more from you.

-S.C.Hahn

[KAREN]

Excellent write! Sad, but the emotion is well expressed!