You Are My Strip Of Light

Dark, intimidating shadows loom.

As a painful silence stains the room.

The disturbed lie awake as demons posses their mind,

as they fear for tomorrow and what grief they will find.

A blinding light pierces through the curtain like a knife,

and it reminds me of you my one reason for life.

The room can not drown into the darkness when there is that intense, white, light,

so I will stay with you no matter how hard the fight.

I dread the day that the curtains seal shut,

as my life will then end with the deepest cut.

Reviews

[Patches I'm not so new..]

What your ongoing theme seems to be is fear, fear of losing something that you have recently found do not fear losing it enjoy it revel in it dream about it This iis "the first day iof the rest of your life" Carpe Deim (sieze the day) it will not come again! I do not avocate an abandament of principals, no that is not my meaning all I am saying is you are much too young to fear every new emotion that comes along---- but only you can decide which to keep and which to discard let fear of hurt by loving be one of them This is a well thought out and expressive write you have talent let it shine girl let it shine!

[Short.Nerd]

Wonderful poem with a very sad messaeg. Great job!

[compositionc]

Another sad, yet brilliant poem.
Its like you're scared of losing someone dear to you.

[Katub]

Beautiful as always, your a great writer, never stop!! I could read your peoms all day! NO JOKE!! You bring out such feeling and hated, its wonderful :')

[lackluster]

I think this is my favorite so far. Making me miss this person hahaha

[Julie Beth]

whoa this is very powerful and shows a lot of emotion once again you have done an outstanding job :D

[Midday_Mystery]

Again Short and powerful, just like the previous piece I reviewed Wonderful Job!

[iamkim]

Awe... The fear of losing someone. I understand. If we happen to love somebody so much, the fear of losing them grows in our hearts.

Oh Hanna! What a lovely poem. You're impressive! I love all your poems. I enjoyed reading them all :)

Feel free to send me your read requests anytime. I would be glad to read all your writings!

Thanks for sharing :)

[Quinn Blackburn]

We all have moments when the darkness seems to swallow us, isolating us with our fear. If we are lucky, we look up long enough to see that strip of light that is always there, although the details may change. great work, Hannah!

[Laranda]

This is very deep, dark, and I think we definately get the feel of what you would like us to get. really sounds beautiful.

[halflives]

The metaphor used in this poem is powerful. Amazing.