Society

The horizon is obscured by the human's glowing, devouring pain,

painting the pathway with flashing colours in the shimmering rain.

Nature is deceived by the cruel, mechanical creatures,

which slide so elegantly with contrived, features.

The roar of a corrupt reality which humanity has created,

is an endless scream of anguish. A death is foretold and fated.

The demise of our existence by the hand consumed by greed,

the hand attached to an arm with cuts too deep to bleed.

The pathway of denial is is pursued and embarked on repeat,

so that the comfort of conformity is diminishing beneath our weary feet.

Deceived by self worth and a consuming promise of immortality,

has ripped the distorted material in the fabric of humanity.

Religion is a sadistic weapon, media is a rehearsed lie,

restraining our tortured mind, igniting the will to die.

Tarnished with mediocrity and content with blinded eyes,

we devour a perception of life which is tainted with lies.

We float helplessly as ghosts on a river of violence and blood,

sustained by self pity yet too deprived of morality to flood.

Reviews

[J Todd Underhill]

Well written I must say I chose this one because I had a song back in the 80's title the same thing and what my eyes beheld was a great piece... better than the song we had, and thought provoking as well. Well done indeed!

[Coyote Poetry]

This is very good poetry. Open the door to a good discussion. Many topics you touched on. I wish i had the answer to the craziness of our world. No weakness in the excellent poem.
Coyote

[laughinglullaby]

Wow. This was a really good piece. You should definitely break it up so its easier to read, but other than that this was fantastic. I love the way you worded this. Keep up the good work

[trainwreck]

Fascinating work. This is very strongly worded, which I appreciate.
As far as structure goes, it may help to break it into stanzas, just because the lines are so long. Overall though, great job!