Looking for Affection

Long blonde hair, fair skin, big gray eyes.

Longing for your attention, but you don't notice.

I want to tell you, but maybe that is unwise.

Would it even matter? Would your response be like ice?

Do I have any hope? Are you like me?

Never knowing if your looks mean anything.

Do you want me to try? Or should I let you be?

You could have anyone, and I have nothing to bring.

Reviews

[M. L. F.]

Oh, you have written something here straight from the heart, and that is a beautiful thing. This is a tough stage of life for a girl, I KNOW, and I want you to know you have so much more to offer than you think. Take this time to grow and learn, to find what YOU really like, what YOU really need, who YOU really are and the rest will come, and much more easily so. Good poem... Thank you for sharing with us..
Misty..

[Hannah]

Thank you so very much, Misty. I really appreciate your kind and caring words. Sorry i didn't respond for so long. I was taking a break from this website.

[d]

this lets me imagine you are talking to me. you never saw me so i know you are not, but i can play and pretend and imagine. and hiding behind a big tree i did notice you there and wonder what it would take to find the courage to approach someone such as you who could have anyone, so why me? should i pretend i never say you?

[Hannah]

Thank you for reading. I take your review as meaning that the poem was relatable and you understand what it felt like.

[d]

in my "not-always-so-direct" way, yes. and that what one might see as not being worthy enough for another, might really be the other one's fear of not being worthy enough for the one.

[Hannah]

Wise words. Thanks again for reading.

[Mark Witterick]

It is a good starting point but I feel you maybe need to go over it a few times. Maybe edit a few bits here and there, especially the ending. I think there is more scope to continue onwards, or even just change a couple of words.

[Hannah]

You're right that this poem could be much better. I wrote it quickly and just wanted to get it out. Thank you for your suggestions.

[Jacob Clifford]

Ah, Hannah, I feel for you. I don't have much experience with affections, either receiving or giving, but even I realize how much torment it can bring, especially for someone unique like you.

[Hannah]

Thank you, Clifford.

[.]

Sad and hopeful. An interesting combination.

A little lament from a hopeful heart. Admiring and wondering from afar the object of one's affection. Such a situation torments the heart and mind. Do we remain silent and stare from the distance? Or do we delve into our reserves of inner strength and make our presence and feelings known to the one we admire. A conundrum. Life is about chances. And sometimes we just need to take a risk and throw our hearts upon the wind and hope that they land in the lap of those we admire.

A lovingly written poem. Youthful, but deep in feeling and intent. We all have something to bring, Hannah. Never forget that. Nice work.

[Hannah]

You are very right. It's a scary experience that doesn't really need to be. Thank you for your kind words and reviewing.

[Kristopher Fandrich]

You could have anyone, and I have nothing to bring. +1

[Hannah]

Thank you, I think (I assume the +1 is positive). I'm glad you read my poem.

[Kristopher Fandrich]

Yes, sorry for the sparse review! I do not know much about poetry, so I didn't have much insight to offer.

[Hannah]

That's fine with me. I just wasn't positive what you meant. Thanks again for reviewing.