Train of Thought

I take night. Let starless ecstasy course through my veins,

As out of the silent din drifts a distant whistling sound.

I scramble through the window into arcane darkness,

And board the steam train, knowing not what I am or where I am bound.

I dare not tread in a world of sleep,

For a dream once trampled is empty, cheap.

 

My train races on past tor and glen,

As my tender locomotive guides her through;

Writhing, gliding stainless steel,

Skipping rungs, as dreamers do.

But tonight I am not along for the ride

For my heart is the engine that powers my mind.

 

The stark moon spotlights my destination,

And I hear the horn’s futile serenade

As I tear past your bedroom window,

Flagging fierce, to no avail.

You do not move, you hardly stir;

Are you on a train....  visiting her?

 

Dawn seeps over the slanting rooftops,

I feel a fool but still I wonder;

How wonderful my dreams would be

If a different train would come for me.

Author's Note

Please let me know your thoughts about this poem in the comments! I would love to hear from you in order to improve my writing in the future.

Reviews

[Tomorrowneverknows]

It is a very original and beautiful poem, full of dreams, wishes,love and passions. I have found this line hard to understand :

' My train races on past tor and glen'

Does mean 'glen' romantic, wild, and gentle all in the same moment ?

- Jesus

[H McG]

Thanks very much! 'Tor' means the rocky summit of a mountain, while 'glen' is a small valley. I'm essentially traveling through the countryside; I just really liked these words and wanted to imply that my journey was a long one.

[Tomorrowneverknows]

You're very welcome! Thank you for the explanation.

[Chris]

The oft proven truism - we don't choose whom we love - just whom we like.

As just a thought - seems so many reflect with an ownership... and an anger when they find they don't. Are we in Love with an expectation - whether or not of an evermore companionship irregardless of what another might find within a life-happens moment? Being there takes ...wanting to, not having to... doesn't it? And that takes both as well... least I would think.

There is a resonance with the sounds of being on the rails... and the feel, tone and mood. Thought-full...

[H McG]

Yes, that is an interesting thought.

[Bare Trees]

You're in contact with your inner thoughts and display great images with each paragraph. It's a shame more people don't review on this site anymore like they used to. You would get a lot of positive feedback for this. Great stuff.

[H McG]

Thanks very much for your comment! I really appreciate the kind words :)

[Bare Trees]

You're welcome.

[SmittyJas]

The very last two lines said it all about a different train making the difference and whole new trip would occur if only a different A-Train would be on the steel tracks tonight underneath the moons light.

[Nikki]

I got a little jumbled in the first paragraph. (Though, my eyes have been bothering me for weeks so it could be and probably was just me, my apologies :/ ) but all in all I enjoyed the ride. I loved your word choices.

[H McG]

Thanks very much!

[Alexx]

This is very well written! I love the words you chose! Definitely keep it up. I'm excited to read more of your work!

[H McG]

Thank you very much! Glad you like my work- I really appreciate it!