His Violin

In the middle of the sidewalk he stands,

And there, clutched carefully in his callused hands,

The little stringed instrument that always makes me sing

His beautiful, wooden violin

 

Every little note that you’d hear him play

Would make you want to dance and sway

You’d tap your toes to the happy rhythm

That came from the music that was played by him

 

When he’d play a melancholy song,

A huge crowd would come along

And watch him try to hide his grief

Or heave a heavy sigh of relief

 

Yes, his violin made the most dulcet sound,

The most beautiful thing you’d hear all around

I threw a coin in his can of tin,

A treat for the poor man and his violin

Reviews

[Chris]

A gentle theme and scheme of rhythm, rhyme, tone and flow... some very minor stumbles and well chosen words.

Take care,
Chris

[Just Cat]

Aww this is sweet, sad but sweet. Maybe the rhyming could do with a little revision in places, but overall I loved it!
Great work :)

[Daytonight]

A really lovely little poem. So melodious itself in rhyme and flow. You can almost hear the strains of his violin! Keep up the great work!

[Hello, Goodbye]

very nice poetic expression.. the notions play out candidly..

[Dreamer]

In my country i see this whenever i go 2 our capital. It is sad. What I personally get from this poem is unrealized dreams. There are many talented people in this world, thats probably the reason why many people dont always get a chance to live their dreams. I think that your commas are nicely placed in the first stanza, making the reader pause where you may want them to pay attention. however i would personally suggest that u be a little careful with ur placement as the poem continues. This is a lovely piece- let ur words reflect the sound of the violin:)

[brenda]

this was sweet i can imagine the man with his violin it mad me cry on the last part nice write !:)

[The fallen of innocence]

beautiful

[Becky C Strukamp]

What a lovely poem. Beautifully written.

[nevermindfan1991]

Such a great poem, beautifully written and told like a story. This was such a great read!