Mirror

You see straight through me,

pointing out my every flaw.

You make me scream and cry.

But I know you don't lie.

Reviews

[Lorry]

Like photographs, what we see in mirrors rarely reflects how we see ourselves. But perhaps that is a good thing, otherwise, I would be walking around all day thinking I am twelve, and thin. It's only catching sight of myself that makes me act like a grown up...sometimes :)

[Hannah]

I like your thoughts on the topic. Thank you for reading and leaving your thoughts.

[Asante]

I really enjoyed this. Concise, but full; brief, yet thoughtful. The mirror sits before you, speaking through silence as loudly as one might with words, and like you said, it doesn't lie to you.

Awesome job, Hannah.

[Hannah]

Thank you very much, Asante.

[Asante]

You're welcome.

[Great Aunt Astri]

The truth we see in a mirror can make us 'scream and cry'. But that mirror is completely impartial and does not judge us. So I think you can consider the mirror as your friend. Your poem, so well put in its brevity, has much wider, even universal, implications. Good write.

[Hannah]

The fact that the mirror is impartial is what makes it so upsetting. What we see is the truth, and we can't hide from that fact. Thank you for reading.

[Great Aunt Astri]

You are welcome. Just be proud to be what you are!

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A very on point write, Hannah.

Yes, the mirror never lies does it? Always truthful without the need for any whispered word. It is always difficult to confront the absolute truth that is reflected in the mirror, particularly on those days when we are not feeling that great about ourselves. For her truth is harsh and unkind, yet we know she never will tell us anything but that truth. And so we are always drawn to her again and again.

I enjoyed this poem, Hannah. Yes, perhaps it could be fleshed out, but as a whole it speaks its own language and its meaning rings true. Nice work.

[Hannah]

I think your review is more poetic than the poem! Thanks for your review, Doodley.

[emipoemi]

Some part of me is saying that despite the brevity saying enough to get the message across, I'm feeling the poem could be fleshed out and explored a bit more. For every line has a sense of profound depth that does work on a stand-alone basis (to thus leave the readers to interpret them all how they see fit), but at the same time, every line allows for the opportunity to be explored (like an invitation for an adventure of self-discovery or whatever). Just some thoughts to think about. This is no way below any level I would rate as great.....but even the great can be subject to tweaks and improvements. Well done!

[Hannah]

I appreciate the feedback, emipoemi. Thanks! I agree that this could be fleshed out more, but I don't know how I would go about doing that.

[emipoemi]

In due time, if you allow it, the poem will tell you how

[Hannah]

Very wise words!