Cold Heart

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Under the shade of the tree,

my heart beats ever faster.

Your gaze never turns away.

Love in every word you say.

Why can't you remember the times like those?

I'm left with your scent on my clothes.

All my dreams put to death.

My heart aches with each breath.

You said you would never leave.

Now I'm alone on Christmas Eve.

I lay awake, staring at the stars

while my heart sits behind bars.

Author's Note

*reuploaded from my old account: http://www.writerscafe.org/HannahTaylor

Reviews

[MomzillaNC]

The pain of loss when a relationship ends… The worst part is the end of hope, the lost promise – that makes finding closure almost impossible. There’s never a finality to the grief of a lost relationship. We can find a new path, and move on, maybe even put the pain behind us, looking forward in new joys. But, how do you find closure when someone just walks away?

[Hannah]

Very thoughtful review, Momzilla. Thank you for reading and taking the time to leave your thoughts.

[MomzillaNC]

You’re welcome

[NAVEED NAWAZ]

s0me0ne came in 0ur life. make his/her place. make that place so mean t0 us. speard his/herself in us. beat in 0ur heart beats. 0ur ear always hear his/her v0ice. 0ur eyes always see his/her sight . after he/she left. we saround by his/her thoughts , love , words and care. war begins bw our love and our end. we just have to say thank you for everything. Thank you for rhe love and pain. Thank you for your words and your deeds. but we can't forget our loved ones 😔 your work done its work hannah. a beautiful work 👍

[Hannah]

Very well said, Naveed. Thank you for reading and leaving your thoughts.

[.]

A relationship ending is painful cause its hard to move on from someone that feels like home. Very beautifully written and relatable.

[Hannah]

Thank you, Ash. I'm glad you enjoyed.

[Diane]

Made my heart hurt reading this. The line that seems all too real is, "I'm left with your scent on my clothes."
Even when someone leaves, they always leave reminders behind.

[Hannah]

It's true that people always leave things behind when they go. Thanks for leaving your thoughts.

[Mamta]

not just this poem but, Your every poem is filled with amazing vocabulary and breathtaking emotions!!!!
NICEEEEEEE

[Hannah]

Thank you very much for all your support.

[Re-Pete]

catchy title. love lost imprisons us. matters of the heart are always difficult as captured in your words. well written and effective in expressing the longing and sadness.

[Hannah]

Thank you for your review, Pete.

[Jacob Clifford]

The title is very fitting, and the point is well expressed. Lying away, with nothing to do but think of that person. Very poignant.

[Hannah]

Thanks, Clifford.

[.]

Quietly emotional write, Hannah.

The feelings portrayed in this poem are infinitely relatable; a love that was so full of promise having now been reduced to only memory, yet the heart within still remains imprisoned to the affections of the departed lover.

Simple in its eloquence and with nothing more to say...

A finely poignant poem. Nicely written.

[Hannah]

Thank you very much, Doodley! You got the meaning of the poem just right. Your review is pretty eloquent, itself.

[Jackie]

this for me was a deep read. beautiful read and love the choice of words used

[Hannah]

Thank you very much, Jackie. I'm glad you enjoyed reading.

[Jackie]

of course. np. maybe swing by check out some my work. and i will check out more yours as well... thanks again