Written...

Height of the night
so dark, so dark
you can't catch light
from a tinder's spark

falling to the ground
so broken, so broken
don't make a sound
no words are spoken

covering tear-swollen eyes
so hurt, so hurt
thinking bout the lies
giving up the alert

a spirit now lay
so tattered, so tattered
what do you say
knowing it never mattered

jagged and ripped apart
so dead, so dead
written from the heart
"the end" it read...

Reviews

[Leila Skye]

Love the flow and style of this one.

[Wondering Mind]

the repeat of the second line of every stanza had a certain effect, quite an interesting one,actually.

[Tate Morgan]

Very intence

[smiley:)]

Beautiful, don't right beautiful, I love it! You are great at this, the way you write a poem is phenomenal. Normally people just guess a word that rhymes with another word even if it doesn't portray what you're trying to say. Get what I' am saying? Like if a person said, "you can have another," then, "even if you can't give one to your brother." I hope you get where I' am going here.
Good, I loved it, keep writing like this,
WONDERFUL,
~Smiley :) (check out some of my stuff)