Survivor

Most of this was written by a teacher friend of mine as a facebook status. I did some arrangements, added a few stanzas and turned it into a poem. Credits to Maz Osman.

A survivor 

His eyes were wet with tears

It trickled down his cheeks
He swept it swiftly away with the back of his hand

His eyes focused on the worksheet

His teacher's voice a blur in the distance

He wished he could leave quickly

Only two were told to stay back and start on their homework

He was one of the two

He thought hard about the maths question

He tried

He really did try

In the quiet corner of the classroom

The clock was ticking loudly

Slowly

The sounds of children's screams pierced through the silence air

Joyful, happy

Unreachable

His tears continued streaming

Fast and furious

Just like his hand moving across the paper

Then like rain on a hot day

His teacher announced that they had done enough

He wiped the remaining tears
He folded the worksheet

He packed his bag

He whispered, " Thank you Madam" 

That was the longest 15 minutes in his life

Author's Note

As I've said earlier, I was impressed by her status, even though it wasn't exactly poetry. So with her permission, i turned it into a poem by doing some arrangements and adding a few more lines. Credits to Maz Osman. This is not my usual style but it's worth a shot. :)

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Teachers have to stay aware of the impact their actions have on students. Sometimes staying after class can stay with a student for a lifetime. You did a great job with the teacher's thoughts here. I could picture the scene perfectly and I empathsized with the student. lydi**

[Hana Saemon]

it is true! i love the way this teacher writes and she is really passionate about her job and ensuring that all students get the best education possible, even if it means spending extra time. it is in the long run good for the student, but in that moment, suffering for him. thanks for the review! :)

[DJ]

Nicely written piece here, emotional with good imagery. It paints a picture of the weeping little boy, who just wanted to be outside with the other children playing. Nicely penned my friend, yet again :)

[London's Lily]

I've been that child many times, unfortunately! I was an exemplary student until certain types of mathematics barged into my life. This is very well-written. It's easy to see the poor boy sitting at his desk, so upset he's brought to tears, frustrated and resentful of the children who already got to leave.
"He wiped the remaining tears"
Aww, that conjures the image of such a pitiful little face!
Well done :)

[Hana Saemon]

Me too! I was horrible with the numbers! Just not my thing. Lol. Thank you for the review! :)

[Tom]

Puts a new emphasis on extra curricular activities !

[Hana Saemon]

tell me about it! haha! thanks for the review! :)