Forfeit

Written ages ago when I first fell in love :)

Looking into your eyes,

There I see,

The whole life, a whole new world

Waiting for me.

 

The sufferings, the pain

The sorrows,

The scars make sense,

They were preparations for tomorrow.

 

I will do it again,

Once over,

Twice even,

Ive fallen under...

 

...your arms,

Into your embrace,

fallen so hard,

lost this race,

 

If losing is what this is,

This game, I'll forfeit,

Steal my heart,

My soul is yours for keeps.

 

The wall is down,

Well, there never was.

Not bulletproof, no ammunition,

Vulnerable, caution ive tossed.

 

Crazy?

Maybe.

Worth the risk?

Totally.

 

Pick me up,

Ive fallen so hard

Or fall with me

And together pick up the pieces of our broken hearts...

Reviews

[DJ]

This is a very sweet and honest write about falling in love. How past pain all starts to make sense as it prepares you for new challenges and how that painful road led you to a love much greater than ever experienced before. I like how you describe being vulnerable to the other person, sometimes its hard to be so open after being hurt but when you come across a true and honest love, caution dissipates, leaving your soul open for the other to either protect and love, or maim and scar.

"Crazy?
Maybe.
Worth the risk?
Totally.

Pick me up,
Ive fallen so hard
Or fall with me
And together pick up the pieces of our broken hearts..."

I love these lines here. I love it when the outside world thinks you are nuts but you have that glorious but scary feeling while taking a risk, although worthwhile, it's thrilling. I also love the idea of two people falling in love and mending their broken hearts together. Beautiful write :)

[Hana Saemon]

awww thank you. i love the feeling of falling in love. i guess if i look at the positive side of his cancer, i got to fall in love 8 times! ^^,

[DJ]

That is pretty cool, I like your positivity.

[Hana Saemon]

negativity only makes one more sick and have bad effects on the immune system. we already have one of us in hospital. i need to stay healthy. circuit training tmrw. HAHA

[DJ]

LOL that sounds intriguing! Goodluck with that! Good on you for remaining healthy!

[Hana Saemon]

HAHA my bf is laughing. lol

[DJ]

haha! Ohh that's good, maybe he needed the laugh aye!

[Hana Saemon]

oh yeah he does. hope he feels better. im gonna bully him and make him cook for me. haha

[Relic]

Funny how we sometimes let go of all fears and jump right in when we have fallen so hard for someone. Nothing matters but that person. Now that I'm older, I'm more cautious. haha Good poem.

[Hana Saemon]

Oh yeah i was cautious but the wind of love took it all away. Haha. Thank you for the review! :)

[Relic]

You're welcome.

[Tom]

This is simple yet captivating, 'we are in it together whatever' is the message it conveys to me !

Quality write !

[Hana Saemon]

thank you for your kind words tom! I hope you've enjoyed the writing :)