Words for poison

this is a poem i wrote in school about someone that really meant something to me. Hope you enjoy it :)

You come around, 

Not that often,

For not that long

Always have something Better to do,

Someone better to be with

Never the one, 

I’m never the one

I’m the only one who really cares

You’re a broom 

Sweeping me away 

Every chance you get

I’m no good in those black holes eyes

Not seeing anything in front of you

You’re a monster!

Big red eyes

Comes out when 

No one sees you

Devouring souls

Putting fears in eyes.

Making children not sleep at night

You are a villain 

Once you have the power, 

Holding them in your hands

Gripping with all your might

Not letting them see pass the tint 

They never knew what you had

Never knew your plans or desires

You were never the same since then. 

Feeding on victims you once adored 

You were the man everyone looked upon 

Devoured all the looks, and love you shown

I see the true side of you

You held your hand out

I was unknowing of the true you

You’re the devil

Hiding the red tint of your face

The long pointed tail

That you stab people in the back

The blood and trust flowing out

The moans and cries at night 

The words you spoke are poison

We believed it though

Now taking the wrath of what we once consumed

I devoured the love you shown

But love is like a mirror 

You can’t always fix something broken without breaking yourself.

I know how it goes,  

I broke myself trying to piece 

The ridges back together 

The cuts and blood pours out

In pain and agony, 

I try piecing them back together, 

One on top of another, 

Trying to pit that one piece in, 

Oblivious of it not compatible

Shards of glass all around me, 

My hands are weakened due 

The sharp pieces of glass

Lodged in my palm,

The blood slowly oozing out

 around the glass. 

Ignoring the pain in my hands,

One by one

I try piecing the unfixable mirror back.

Love takes time 

Time is a ticking time bomb 

Sooner or later

I’ll take the pain off my back.

I walked away and let it all shatter to a thousand pieces.

Author's Note

what do you think I should fix? Any grammer errors? tell me your real opinion. your likes n dislikes! thank you!

Reviews

[Ally Monique]

Wow, I can really relate to this! This evil person you've described sounds just like my Ex haha! You have a lot of memorable lines in here such as:
"You’re a broom
Sweeping me away
Every chance you get"

and

"But love is like a mirror
You can’t always fix something broken without breaking yourself."

Quick question: is there a "to" missing in this line?
"My hands are weakened due
The sharp pieces of glass"

Thank you very much for sharing, it was a pleasure to read :)

[Hana Linzi]

Thank you for pointing that one out to me! This one has to relate to a few. one being an ex the other being my own father. I am glad you really liked this one. It puts a smile on my face! Thank you! for reading my poem!