Say Anything

Can't quite describe the depth of this short poem... Just know that there is a special kind of pain that these words are laced with.

His thundering silence ruptures her eardrums.

He swallows his thoughts, 

Their ambiance corrodes; 

Like sandpaper stuck in her throat.

Her heart bleeds, 

It hurts more than anything.

She elucidates every word, every scathing feeling;

She cries and cries for him to save her life...

He still says nothing.

Reviews

[Mrs Mania]

"Like Sandpaper stuck in her throat". I especially enjoyed this line in particular because it expresses the knot in someone's throat when words are simply to painful to speak. Good job!

[Phill Oz O'fee]

I read this as a peotic interpretation of ‘unrequited love’! The pain of loving someone who doesn’t feel the same way about you can be almost unbearable. It certainly doesn’t feel romantic. It just feels devastating.

Sad, but intellectual write and an interesting read - :-)

[Haley]

Thank you. :)

[¿]

Heart rotting pain and stone hearted the one who gave....this one is a great read...thanks for sharing☺!

[Great Aunt Astri]

I think that is called 'stone-walling'. Some consider it to be emotional torture. And you have certainly described the hurt in this very personal, yet universal, poem. Good for you!

[wordman]

sounds like every day life,

[Maxwell Ryder]

I like this poem because the person in need feels so proximal to the resin ignoring the person crying out, and yet we drown so close to the help we could have gotten.

[Lost_Soul]

Wow, that's amazing. It's sad, but the words are exquisite. I love the way you word each line and make it seem real. It reminds me so much of me. If it helps listen to "Listen to You Heart" by DHT while reading this poem.

[Kiwi.jh]

Woah. I thinks that all I can say... This hit me hard, It's full of emotion. (which by the way is conveyed perfectly) Your words work perfectly with the mood of the poem. This was a really good read. Woah.

[Pash]

Sadly I know this story all to well. It was devastating when it happened. After reading your this piece, I was slammed back into that moment.
Good writers have that kind of power. Keep it up!
DB

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Thank you for entering the comp I will be announcing winners next Saturday as I have to review all over next week love your poem very deep