Eyes of God

Inspired by the song "The Bells of Notre Dame" from the Disney movie The Hunchback of Notre Dame. It is a bit dark and is written in a RoseMarie style.

Going through life my own way,
Unaware of greatest debt I will pay,
Indulging myself in deepest desire,
Little aware of the all-consuming fire,
Til' the day I lay within a black crypt,

Yet my soul will have no relief in the pit...

Author's Note

How did it flow? What ca think?

Reviews

[Brad Rancourt]

Very good flow! Really enjoyed this, I'm not religious but I am sure that many people feel this way. Well done.

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

I like it, it flowed really well and i like how it spells out guilty. A lot of people go through life like this, which is sad.

Good Job

[(JR) Joshua Hernandez]

Yeah thanks! I'm writing another one in responce

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

You should send me a read request when you are done with the other one..I might not see it otherwise xD