~Try~

Try waking up in the morning and picking up a new breaths that you do not know.. Try to wear a heart with no instructions. Try to stand at the bus station waiting, waiting for a bus is not for you.. Try lounging with friends who are not your friends.. Try to stand and see the void spaces behind your lost things without you mourn on them.. Try to smile on the disappointments of the last night without your concern.. Try to not get scared while your heart is still beating.. Try to live a day without your heart roughshod with a wish.. Try to become transparent to the degree you do not see your face on the mirror.. Try to see your pain falling from above you on your back and excited joy stands in front of you.. Try to laugh on loudly voice in the time which your heart is broken in tow halves.. Try to take off your memory, that saturation for the moment without that robs them on the past and no future.. Try to mimic the sound of the clouds in the sky.. Be dedicated flower in the hands of a lover that don’t fade .. Try to be water that washes city aches, then travels without waiting for a refund.. Try to be a red balloon in the hands of a child, or a piece of candy in the other hand.. Or a smile on the face of an orphan on the other side of the city.. Try to be bisected of a poem inside the head of a poet who never writes a poetry and does not know what does poet mean.. Try to be a delight in the heart of your mother.. Try to be a love that wake up in the heart of a passing butterfly..

Enough drowning yourself, divest ‘‘yourself’’ from you ..

Try something you are not

Something is not like you

And it did not concern you one day!

You can do it! Give it a try. 

Reviews

[Revery]

Read this again. It so flies in the face of so many of life's paradoxes. Such a mixed bag, but the message of continuance, of not only who we are but what we are, what we can do, what we can experience, and the capacity to know the full range of experience with acceptance. Love it.

[Half Dream]

I agree. I always appreciate your review as I explore through your words I cherish each word as a treasure. I miss you my friend! :)

[Frieda P]

'Try to mimic the sound of the clouds in the sky.' I wish I had pen'd that line, brilliant. All we can do is try, and the way you see things on one day, will/could be totally different on the next day, and the next decade you'll wonder what the heck were you even thinking to worry about friends who are not your friends indeed. Yep, try to be a butterfly warrior, they do metamorphosis best, and you'll flutter in magnificence always Maya.

[Half Dream]

Oh my, thank you so very much Frieda. Yes, exactly try indded.. Thank you so much Frieda for your kind review. You're extremely kind my dear. You made my day. :)

[Odysseus Wanders]

Try as I might, I feel what I feel. As I read, I see not what you try... but what you do. I feel the speaker saying, this IS what I live with. This is what I feel..... picking up new breaths not my own, a heart with no help, stuck at a bus station(not going anywhere, trapped), no friends... One who courageously stands, and willingly looks into the void( of what was lost). Sacrificing.
So for me, every try is really an is. And gee wiz! Thats a lot of trying! The poem is fat with it, even having grown large in its dominating block print. It commands the entire pages attention. No space spared. Its adds to the overwhelming sense of inundation to me... The poem is so very full of all this feeling... and at the same time, unsure of how to let itself speak... So! Enough drowning yourself...! Divest yourself from you...! Try to become some other thing. Because this thing here... is overwhelmed, and exhausted, and cannot do one more day. So you do it.... Its asking the poem to become not a poem. And the more the poem tries to become something else, all the more of a poem it becomes.
So to me. A beautiful poem full of courage heart and truth.
Thank you for this writing.

[Odysseus Wanders]

Sorry, that other one posted weird... So, I redo:)

[Half Dream]

It may won't take you a day to do all this but you have to leave it to the time and to try indeed. Thanks a lot for your review Terry, I know how does it feel.. I agree with most of you what said. Thanks again for your visit. :)

[Half Dream]

Yeah, I noticed. It's okay.

[Half Dream]

This is a sad but beautiful piece Half Dream, I see you try as much in this prose poem, you give us, that we all try, we all face in life by trial and error, and to that we keep on trying.

I like your healing, voice to the last part, in a special way, even though it is sad, you do not walk away for things, and shall try, even new things....

What will make you, (us) and anyone stronger.... A very good one!!

Much love,

- Elisa

[Half Dream]

Thank you very much sweetie! I appreciate your wonderful visit and reviews. :)

You're welcome anytime my dear friend :) love your writings, and I shall come back for more xx

[Relic]

Some of these lines are disjointed and sound grammatically wrong but overall this is a good poem. My favorite line: Try to wear a heart with no instructions. WOW! Good stuff.

[Half Dream]

I'll fix the grammar errors and re post it again! Thanks for reading and commenting. :)

[Relic]

No problem HD.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Indeed try... this would read better in a different format... with all the "Try" in the beginning of each line... This has a lot going on in a relatively long paragraph of a write... May be that's your intent to give one big thought in one big statement...

[Everett DeValle]

Coming of age, I see, things that were once familiar to you, you are growing out of...whats cool, whats not...I get it...insightful write...Don't Try...Just Do It like Nike meaning don't think about...you grow and gain experience...there's no other world than stepping outside...it doesn't matter, if your beautiful inside or outside...it takes grit and determination...for example, you go to a local coffee shop...you see cute boy but can't manage to say Hi...all the self talk and self doubt...Just Do It...F it...say Hi...that's the thrill of it all...never fear rejection, and you will see the growth of the person you can be.

[Half Dream]

Well said indeed. Thanks for reading. :)

[Everett DeValle]

You are very welcome.

[MoriartyMesa]

This read as something your either missing or wanting, but the main focus I found was the wording and how your delivery was, not to say there must have been a muse behind this, but more talent waits.

[Half Dream]

Thank you! :)

[Revery]

So much is flowing from you lately. That can't be bad in spite of all. I like the passion good and bad that pours out of this. Your are beautiful inside and out. I especially liked the line, "Try to mimic the sound of the clouds in the sky."

[Half Dream]

I try the best I could to pen down whatever I feel. As always thanks for your kind words and your wonderful encouragements. :)