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You wake up and you have no name

You look around and everything looks the same

The world through your eyes is all in black and white

You rub your eyes to ensure your sight

The world around you begins to crumble

You stand up and attempt to walk but all you can manage is a weak stumble

The falling debris begins to reveal a blinding light

You climb the rubble to gain some height

You glance in the direction of the illumination

You see the most colorful illustration

Beauty and grace as far as the eye can see

You race towards the light swiftly 

You run and run and run but you make no ground

You stop and realize you hear no sound

you fall down to your knees 

You let out a blood-curdling scream

The darkness begins to swallow you whole

The emptiness begins to take its toll

You slowly fall back into a deep slumber

You suddenly hear a rolling thunder

The lightning flashes and you jolt awake

You look out the window and realize it's still late

So you lay back down and close your eyes 

And dream of better days 

Reviews

[emipoemi]

narrative good; imagery, great; musicality could use a few tweaks here and there so it flows smoother. Other than that, wow, well done!