We're All Candles...

Imagine yourself as the glowing flame of a candle.
Very rarely do you stay still.
All the energy bundled up tight inside of your body aches to get out.
It breaks through your veins, being released in strong, forceful, swaying waves.
You're always moving.
But with just a little push of breath, you can be knocked out easily,
A breath, intent on blowing you out, destroying you.
Compare a simple breath to a hateful insult.
The insult has the strongest impact on you.
You keep cool and try to shrug it off, but it repeats inside of your head.
It repeats until you break down and die mentally.
It can be so cruel, you force yourself to die physically.
While blowing candles out may be all in fun and traditional, imagine yourself as the candle.
You're a hyped up, sensitive mess in the form of a light orange flame.
One blow, and you're down.

~~Think before you act.~~

Author's Note

This is actually very old haha, but I've been told it's some of my best work. Hope you liked it!

Reviews

[Arsh]

Those who`ve told you that this`s your best work are to the tea correct. Even this piece`s really seemed better than the best.. to me. And, I enjoyed its every word that`s speaking up to me `bout redemption... am I right? The thing that I loved the most`s a comparison of 'candles' with 'life' and the 'flames' with 'thoughts'. What a beautiful mixture you`ve blended.. with your words! Btw, it`s one oi my favorite poems. Keep it up! ;)

[Lizzie Mitchell]

Strong, deep message in this
I love when writing makes me think!
great piece!

[closed]

this is a really cool analogy. the concept of the candle is very much universal. well composed I'd say.

[KeeD]

The poem at the start is very inviting to the reader, much like a story it pulls you straight in.
I have to say it is incredible writing indeed, has a profound message and fantastic delivery.
A candle flame is a moment of beauty, with its magnificent orange hue, once blown out you can see the tragedy in its method of black flames turning into the nothingness that surrounds it. Like a last cry for help, a plea, a tear.. Humanity is a candle flame blowing itself out. Your message is so profound and incredible you might just be one of my new favorite poets. Thank you for sharing.

[Haley Wilson]

That's one of the best compliments I've ever gotten aww. Thanks :)

[icelandicblue]

I like this analogy...we try to break out of our shell and are thwarted by a mere breath. Life is fragile and so is living. This was well done.

[beautiful dreamer]

wow this is super deep! it certainly is good work! i like the message behind it very much so. Sometimes we need that reminder that insults are out there and they HURT bad. But its up to you to deflect them and/or not let that happen to you or your fellow "candles" to stay away from the strong blows. great poem :)

[Haley Wilson]

Thanks! xoxo
This was written when I was quite younger as well, I'd say 13/14. :)

[Rita L. Sev]

A breath, intent on blowing you out, destroying you...

A powerful allegory here, Haley; a wise and well-written piece.

[Haley Wilson]

Thanks so much! c:

[Laura Lynn]

great, I have to be careful this holiday season, my relatives knocking me out all the time, it's extremely sad, pathetic, and devastating, nothing good about it for us right now at all, we going through so much illness toward another, but I will carry this forward with me into the new season, I think this will be helpful, at least we will have candles, which is one good cheerful thing

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Very Different Imagination or Observation With A Meaningful Msg In The End

[Jennie Baron]

Congratulations on a poem that is profound and insightful beyond your age! You have captured the emotions so expertly. How fragile feelings and life itself are; you've hit it straight on.

[Haley Wilson]

This is like the best compliment ever haha. Thank you! xx