Wishing for Love

Wishing for Love

A Poem by HaleythePoet
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An old love poem I found in my notebook.

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Wishing for love
Is like wishing for world peace
I can't see why I can't have it
Is there something I am doing wrong?
Am I not pretty enough?
Because I know I am strong enough
But maybe I've been strong for too long
Too long have I watched couples being happy
Too many birthdays I have spent alone
Too many abusive relationships I've been through
Each time I try
Something goes wrong
Each time I fail
Makes me think I'll always be the underdog 
There are fish in the sea
I feel like a fish in the sand
Suffocating, breathless, and writhing in pain
Whenever I get back in the water
All I find are sharks
Or fish too old for me
Or fish already taken
I feel like a rainbow trout among a sea of bass
I don't fit in
I don't belong
I don't feel safe
Too long have I been a loner
Too long. 

© 2013 HaleythePoet


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Sometimes I do feel like that fish you wrote about, so yeah I love this poem. Its really straightforward and points out the perfect emotions. And I hope you get out of this phase and write happy songs :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


This writing has a lot of good qualities. I really like the word picture you paint with it. You say that you found this in a notebook, so I am presuming it is one that was written by you sometime in your past. I hope you still do not feel so lonely as you state in this writing. I am not going to go toward the temptation to make comments beyond a review of the writing per se, but hope you are in a better place now. Nice writing, albeit the subject matter is of sadness.

Posted 11 Years Ago


My first thought were facetious - She exists in the present! "Hi you." Welcome back. And THEN I listened to your thoughts.

I think you NEED to read your thoughts aloud...three times through. Slowly, and with emotional intent ...and listen. I did.



Posted 11 Years Ago



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HaleythePoet
HaleythePoet

Harrisburg, PA



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