Believe

Believe

A Poem by DeafeningPoem
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My Feelings

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Believe in things you cannot see, Believe in dreams yet to be. So simple yet so close at hand, this powerful truth by which I stand. Do not listen to things that are not, and spend no time with others who ought. The courage of a lion grows when he listens and waits when nobody knows. Time knows how much time it has No need to hurry, I know this as my life moves slowly still to be at peace I know I will. Believe that all awaits you yet in dreams and hopes and those we’ve met that faith and will win in the end. My beliefs in this will never end.

© 2008 DeafeningPoem


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The courage of a lion grows when he listens and waits when nobody knows.

I really like that line. It makes me think of a lion stalking in the brush, growing in courage because no one knows hes there and he can pounce!

Overall, I liked many of your ideas, but I think you should put it into a format that makes it easier to absorb. Meaning, add a little more rhythm and rhyming. It just feels unnatural in reading and absorbing to have rhymes and not in like... a line by line rhyme scheme. BUT that's up to you. I mean, i've seen it done before in a paragraph form, but I think it would work better line by line for you.

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Posted 16 Years Ago


hey i love this poem of yours...i agree to you we have to believe.hehe keep it up.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on May 20, 2008

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DeafeningPoem
DeafeningPoem

Lebanon , OR



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