Hollow

A shout of many words
Inside my head to the hollow statue
They swim and dance
To the songs of many.

Inside my head to the hollow statue
All the passages of time
To the songs of many
And all that is spoken here.

All the passages of time
In the labyrinth of my mind
And all that is spoken here
Observe the stages of the flame.

A shout of many words
In the labyrinth of my mind
Observe the stages of the flame
They swim and dance.

6-5-09

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Not bad, and you obviously have a very clear and evocative image you want to present here. You've cultivated a solemn air in this piece and it really works well for you. Very well done.

[H.T. Kainaroi]

Thank you!