Cinders

crackle, listen ,tumbling wood

strumming softly to be understood

graceful ,peaceful, surrender surrounds

letting the cinders tumble down

winds shift, understanding stands still

slowly ,walking , creeping uphill  

stumbling, falling, cinders burn down

stopping, staying , ashes surround

burning swiftly, the cinders will fall

empty but beautiful, started it all 

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Reviews

[ANTO]

For carbon-based beings, theres something very gripping about watching something being reduced to carbon Holly. Perhaps its a recognition deep within of the process - is that what you meant by the last line "...started it all" ?
This recalled to me a German TV channel which closed down every night with the image of a real fire burning (recorded in real time), which I found truly memerising - not unlike the imagery you have conjured here for the reader.
Its great to read you again dear friend. Have a great weekend :D

[Jennifer]

Lovely movement in this poem, it wisps along in a lovely way.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and the cinders burn and the cinders fall...i imagine sitting in front of a bonfire, like i have often done, and wondering what the flames are thinking of us as we watch them.

this has the rhythm of a glowing ember brightening and fading, brightening and fading.

[A. Amos]

Your poetry is all about messages, such an honor reading your work...

[C. Rose]

Haunting.

A few askew commas.

Every other pair of lines rhymes. Why did you do that? Curiosity speaking, not meanness.

Very rhythmic.

[Holly Mason]

no meanness taken*)......as for the rest because it reads well ...I just love words , structuring and placing them ....as they softly tumble ....
thank you for reading much and nice meeting you*)

[lee von cleef]

"Cinder" my red merle Shepard , My first, chased trucks, I called, he looked,
" Cinder "
Yes, your words still me, move me, and I call to "Cinder"

[Chris]

I appreciate the feeling within this one all the more after the last few days of refrigeration... I need sit in front of a fire and let the mind flow where I need to be.

[❤ Maggie ❤..]

Holly, this was a wonderful write. It shows such a picture, and I could see it so vividly in my head, while reading this. Poems like this are always my favorite :) Keep up the good work, and I hope you're doing well!!

[Rita L. Sev]

The flow and rhyme of this are excellent; wood, fire, ashes... what we build in the past burns in memory... Love this, Holly.