Wanna Play?

squealing children run about

inner child come on out     

stay and play, horse around

spinning and twirling, falling down

swing so high see toes in heaven

whipping, sending ,turning seven

balloons bouncing ,cake covered smiles

open presents ,screeching wild

messy fingers come to a stop

musical chairs, hop hop hop

squealing commences, fun in the air

all the way down to the last two chairs

fun delight in children's hearts

childhood is where laughter starts 

the best days that blast away

but memories fondly forever stay  

Reviews

[Yellow Butterfly]

Wonderful childhood memories stay with us forever.... to be young again... aaah


Lovely write Holly :)

[Holly Mason]

well if you were young again...a cocoon sleep over...*)*))
thank you so fine yellow butterfly...goodie bags included

[Yellow Butterfly]

LOL...... wow.... now that would be the sleepover of all sleepovers Holly.... thanks for rekindling my childhood memories... :))

[s y e]

Oh how this used to be me! Ha, you can hear the screaming, laughing kiddies in the background. So cute! I loved it, Holls.

[Holly Mason]

and you would win Musical chairs...even if I have to knock the little kiddies down*)
thank you little princess

[s y e]

Aha, you're coming with me next time I have a musical chair party, hee :')

[Frieda P]

OH what fun Holly, I could hear giggling in the background....happy days, your poetry always makes me smile my sweet friend!

[Holly Mason]

goodie bags included...*)
thank you fine lady

[ShelleyA]

Hi Holly. A delightful write about the memories of fun and games of childhood that calls out to our inner child. A fund read. Skillfully crafted rhyming couplets. Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, you paint a vivid picture of this play that any reader can appreciate and see in their mind's eye. Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm and enjambment. Rhyme is good. A good mix of near rhyme and near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece. Nice use of internal rhyme. Lovely depth of feeling; you express beautifully the joy of these memories of our childhood that I can relate to. Good word choice as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance. Good closing lines. Well penned and an enjoyable read. Write on!

[Holly Mason]

Thank you so much ....now wanna play? and p.s. I will have to look up about 10 things from your review always appreciate the pursuit of higher knowledge and that is what you give nice lady*)

[ShelleyA]

You're very welcome Holly and thank you... of course! If there is something you don't understand, just let me know; I'll try to explain it.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh yes I remember those carefree days, if only to go back for just one day.

[Holly Mason]

childhood times...the best
thank you fine rock and roll sir

[Angi]

What a cute little poem, Holly! I remember those days. It is hard to get down and play when you are my age. I need to relax a little bit, don't I? Angi~

[Holly Mason]

sometimes playing is just fun*) thank you fine lady

[closed]

this is an adorable poem
i luv your word use
youre really good at it

[Holly Mason]

thank you kindly for your words....take a balloon with ya*)