fingertips glow

light , ablaze, fingertips glow

seeping indeed ,streaking low

shivers, quakes ,earth moves so slowly

tumbling, falling, until you are below me

lift the gifted towards the stars

hold them sacred for what they are

rolling, thunderous, mountain clap

securely knowing, a set driven map

reaching into what you hold deep

lofty, my nerves have forever to seep

rip out the parts that come close to breath

live this life for you there will be nothing left

light, ablaze, fingertips glow

a true heart will know when to let it go

Reviews

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~ a very pretty poem... with beautiful images... indeed, "a true heart will know when to let it go"... and the best part is that every heart can be a true heart if it wishes to be one... all it has to do is to let go of all that is untrue... but it seems like not many people know this... :P

[Holly Mason]

thank you truly

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~ you're very welcome... :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Living a life without sacrificing for other is a one way ticket to eventual loneliness... another thing that came to mind reading this is how we need to look more with the heart than the eyes if we want to see the true beauty of the world.

[Holly Mason]

always searching for the beauty in the world...I admire that quality to the fullest*)
thank you fine sir, truly

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I really liked the conculsion of this piece. In the reading, I thought of many different things...the saving of a person's soul (or emotions), a sexual encounter, etc. I'm not sure I ever truly put my finger on what this was about, but I like the imagery and the flow.

A few little suggestions:
In the line "light, a blaze, fingertips glow" I would probably either go with "light a blaze, fingertips glow" (taking out the first comma) or with "light, ablaze, fingertips glow" (changing "a blaze" to "ablaze"). It depends on if you were trying to use an adjective or a verb...just a little grammatical thing.

Otherwise, this piece had me wholly entertained throughout. Well done!

[Holly Mason]

thank you so love the ablaze-*)
thank you for visiting

[Ency Bearis]

Awesome poem, brilliant piece and nice to read.

[Holly Mason]

thank you fine sir truly

[Ency Bearis]

my pleasure, and you're welcome

[Jack...]

Beautiful Holly. Like a glowing sunrise in my morning. You have a way of making me smile. Very nice.

[Holly Mason]

same back at ya....my fingertips would glow better if the dang shift key would quite gettin stuck!!!
thank you so fine sir

[jacob erin-cilberto]

fingertips flying over the keys...illuminating thoughts, and they glow on the page...
you glow!

[Holly Mason]

aaahhhh I glow*)
thank you so fine sir truly

[Tim Buckley]

Holly,
Hi again. I just read four of your poems. You got the gift! You have a way of inserting innocence into your work; also, you take the ordinary & make it extraordinary. The only suggestion I could make is that some parts were a bit esoteric--over my head. Now, that could just be me. I'll re-read them & see. A little more concrete wording may help (A gal told me that once & I got upset. But after asking myself if the common man would get it, I saw she was right).
By the way, if you don't mind, what do you mean by writing "...this is my last year..." in your profile? Tim

[Holly Mason]

bio-it is what it is*)
as far as advice-I thrive on it
as a child I read Serendipity as a young adult (dramatic*) I read only 17th century English poetry...it tends to slip into my writing...I do enjoy provoking thought that is a little deeper but I do not want it to be so that it turns readers away...so I thank ya fine sir
thank you much for reading truly

[Tim Buckley]

I'll read more
Tim

[redflutterby]

Just stunning Holly. The words flow like fast moving water as I read this
;-)

[Holly Mason]

thank ya much just had my first round of glowing fingertips*)
thank you so much fine lady

[redflutterby]

Your welcome sweet friend!! ;-)