Burnt Out Flame

Boom of silence

upon night chambers call

darken the embers so slowly do fall

enter eternity with undue white mists

creeping halls surrounding raging fists

the embers call with red nighttime fire

yell her name she will hear your desire

lost love flame with eternity in white mists

losing control with rage of foe 

come hither in all of this

burnt out flame

was the one to blame

keep her sir

but give me her name

Reviews

[Holly Mason]

Such a brilliant wording and message you bring to us here, beautiful woman!
I felt an eerie way of what I do admire so much, "fireman's" and this was touching me.
You have no idea, how deep this is... (at least for me), I loved the gothic feel of it, and the darker space, you embrace with your words... just fantastic.

- Elisa

[Holly Mason]

thank you beauty writer ...I send out a lot of littles and sometimes I have to remind that I am a writer I just mask it well
I truly appreciate you reading thank you kindly

You're most welcome Holly dear, and I will read each of yours, within time... I'm kind of a new fan to your work, it has so much in little I so adore... :) xo

[quinfinn]

feel like i'll encounter the crypt keeper any moment with this one. very dark, very enigmatic and very, very good! this write frustrates interpretive efforts but i think i like that fact. always a very enjoyable read from your pages, Holly.

[Holly Mason]

lovin' the interpretive efforts!
thank you for reading fine sir truly

[s y e]

Wow, this is an amazing write from you, Holly! As always, you never fail to amaze me! A dark mystery, I loved it!

[Holly Mason]

thank you little miss*)nice new hair do

[s y e]

Ha, thanks :-P

My pleasure!

[Frieda P]

This could be about love or an inner turmoil of self acceptance. Or perhaps the questioning of both...either way, lovely read Holly. You do dark mysteries well.

[Holly Mason]

thank you there lovely lady

[Carolann Dowsett]

Amazing write Holly, dark and powerfully foreboding. I sense violence intermingled with love in this.

[Holly Mason]

thank you for absorbing this it is dark but sometimes dark can be lovely
thank you for taking time to read truly*)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome :)

[A. H. Pinley]

It is kind of dark, but we as humans enter that place at times. It's like a blanket draped over our heads. Consuming our emotions. To trick us into feeling defeat. Great write Holly!

[Holly Mason]

thank you so fine sir

[J. Hampton]

You've well captured the properties of love as we often think of it...desire..
Fire... Embers... And mist. Eternal...
Vivid
Like this I do

[Holly Mason]

I am very glad you liked it
thank you so truly

[Callum]

there's alot of rage in this, seems to be a downfall in love, "lost love flame with eternity in white mists, losing control with rage of foe". nice write!

[Holly Mason]

thank you much truly

[Callum]

it's my pleasure. :o)

Cal

[Rita L. Sev]

This is a great piece - the beginning had a "Poe" feel, and the foreboding was well played out. Deep and dark for a sunny afternoon, but I thoroughly enjoyed!

[Holly Mason]

I write a lot of silly stuff so every once in awhile I like to say hey i can write if I chose to*)*)thank you so it is dark but dang i like the feel of it
thank you teach truly

[Sami Khalil]

"yell her name she will hear your desire

lost love flame with eternity in white mists.:
I love those lines but the whole poem too...:)

[Holly Mason]

thank you kind sire truly-Boom of silence -*)*)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome kind lady....:)