Sun Lilly's

Here is where the light fairy's play

coming with a soft song to lay

sun lilly by the flowing stream

fairy light with her body beam

rays of peaceful ribbon light

wrapping the stars with delight

fluttering wings of paradise

sun lilly fairy's shine on tonight

she whispers a dust of fairy breath

so long sun lilly for fairy death

and with no light for fairy's shine

no sun lilly could be divine

Author's Note

sorry about proper punctuation etc. this just felt right

Reviews

[Larry Dyson]

lovely fairie prose.. softly lit by the lillys sunlight.

[Holly Mason]

thank you very much for reading truly appreciate*)

[Michael G. Smith]

Beautiful, the rhythm flows nicely, but dare I say excet for one line. Try stars with such delight. It is how it read in my mind as I read along. What do think about last line could quite "survive"? In my opinion if you capitalized the first letter in each line it would bring more attention to the line. Just some honest suggestions. I am always open to some on mine also. I know this will make me a better and humble writer. Thanks, Michael.

[Holly Mason]

I truly appreciate your advice...I will reread it with your touches in the short future I just got finished making 48 goodie-bags for the jr.high basketball team and I am heading to the game in a bit so my head is wired and will not digest correctly at the moment you are a family man you know busy kids dizzy parents!!hahaha thank you so much again

[Michael G. Smith]

Your welcome. Thos edays are gone for me. My youngest now has just turned twenty. Miss those days, sometimes.

[Zap-the-awesome]

It was great! I know that's not much of a review but its the only thing I know to say. X)

[Holly Mason]

well that is all that needs to be said ...thank you I write different it is kind of bad you never know what you are going to get but I believe everyday is different one day to the next*)

[Zap-the-awesome]

It is!! I guess I don't really write all that different, but I have fun with it. XD

[emmajoy]

Your words made me smile, feel happy! The poem skips along with wonderful images and the meter makes it into a kind of song to fairies and all things beautiful like lilies and colours and whiffs of breath and.. and .. Love it!

[Holly Mason]

thank you so very much again this is my favorite just love it it was meant to stir emotion so thank you so much for appreciating it much

[Yellow Butterfly]

Sun lillys are beautiful and so is this poem.... :O)

[Nightfall]

So delight...fulll

[Holly Mason]

thank you very much*)

[quinfinn]

well, i can't help myself, i have to say this is fairy, fairy good! i have always been fascinated with the subject of faeries...this is indeed a delightful homage to their playful ness and purported roles in nature. nicely written!

[Holly Mason]

you are killing me with the fairy fairy good thing...nice Sunday laugh*)
and thank you for reading

[quinfinn]

glad i could bring you some mirth on a Sunday morning (it is morning in North Carolinas)

[Paul Seaman]

I hate to see faries bite it. It has a nice lilting tone that matches the fluttering wings of fairies that are all around us, when we are in beauty. you poem demands re-reads, which I believe is always the sign of strong work. Thank you for writing it.

[Holly Mason]

thank you much really

[A. H. Pinley]

I can actually see this world of fairies. Thank you for writing it.

[Holly Mason]

and thank you for reading it*)