Sun Lilly's

Here is where the light fairy's play

coming with a soft song to lay

sun lilly by the flowing stream

fairy light with her body beam

rays of peaceful ribbon light

wrapping the stars with delight

fluttering wings of paradise

sun lilly fairy's shine on tonight

she whispers a dust of fairy breath

so long sun lilly for fairy death

and with no light for fairy's shine

no sun lilly could be divine

Author's Note

sorry about proper punctuation etc. this just felt right

Reviews

[escapingherself]

This is fantastic! Something so sweet doesn't require proper punctuation, because it DOES feel right just the way that it is.

[Holly Mason]

thank you very much*)

[Allen Smuckler]

Forget the punctuation...this was breathtaking...
such vivid, colorful imagery...made for a beautiful, radiant write..
Good use of metaphors as well...
I was surprised by the last line..
I thought it would read "and all sun lilies are divine"
The entire body lead up to that and yet you let it go...
Great write never-the-less
completely enraptured me...(is that a word)
it really is so light, lily, ethereal, and playful...
allen

[Holly Mason]

thank you very much but without the fairies light no sun lilly could be divine*)

[Allen Smuckler]

my bad...kinda missed that
You're right
of course you're right ... it's your write
allen

[The Gero]

nice evocative piece that, many congrats.

[Holly Mason]

thank you so very much by the way I really like your photo it gives you a sense of strength (teenagers view and she is a photographer) thank again*)

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

Enchanting magical description. Vibrant visual cues. Melodic flow that set my heart to singing. You are correct in the author's note, "This just feels right"

[Holly Mason]

thank you very much for your kind words*)

[rnuff]

Such a wonderful read, nicely written

[Holly Mason]

thank you very much truly

[Samuel Dickens]

Conjuring delightful, fairytale-like images, this is lovely.

[Holly Mason]

and very spring like*)
just watch my local weather I am done-sleet then the other icey rain stuff and a couple inches of snow...oh well we have soup*)

[Samuel Dickens]

Soup is good, and warms the soul.

[James Tincher]

very visual... i pictured this little yellow fairy and feel the rays of light. :)

[Holly Mason]

thank you for taking the time to read...yellow is my favorite color*)

[James Tincher]

Its a happy color... :)

[Holly Mason]

I love the fact so badly you transform day and night, into those ray's of light.
And you listen to what is really important, keen insight, on what is beautiful,
and this was mesmerizing, as a lot of your writes are. Indeed, divine is the word,
Thank you so much for sharing Holly :)

- Elisa

[Holly Mason]

thank you so much for reading and you have a very bright...body beam*)

[Sami Khalil]

rays of peaceful ribbon light

wrapping the stars with delight

fluttering wings of paradise

sun lilly fairy's shine on tonight
Wow . That did it for me in this awesome poem...Keep penning dear poetess...:)

[Holly Mason]

thank you sir much those are my favorite lines...what it would be like to be in rays of peaceful ribbon light

[Sami Khalil]

Awesome ones . You are welcome...:)

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

It read right too! The imagery was stunning, and flowed effortlessly!

[Holly Mason]

thank you much really

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Welcome!